by sexyfreak11
without doubt your one hell of a writing.
this first story was so very erotic and very exciting.
another out standing brilliant writer,#
make no mistake. your going to be the best up with the leaders. in writing erotica , and very hot horny stories ,
your good no the word is great. i love it . keep them cumming and me. thank you now more of that fabulous stories.
I won't presume to tell you where to take this, you've got a good sense for it. I love the pace of the story, how you are in no rush to use your girl, how you mix in his willingness to feed her and make her somewhat comfortable, you didn't have him rape her mouth, etc. I've listed you as a favorite in order to see how this comes out. If you do want to discuss the story line, send me an e-mail, I'd be glad to tell you how good you are.
So write about the birth of your slut. -Kevin
I agree with Splendid nice pace and overall well written go for it I am intrigued but please don't land up with her being the local whore and cum slut let her enjoy a while as well.
Extremely hot story. Can't wait to see where it goes next. An incredible imagination and literary skill. Makes it even hotter than it's something you would like to happen to you... ;)
Great Story ... you have done a great job, and I cannot wait to read the rest of your story
An enjoyable read :) I hope there is much more to come on this story. Keep up the good work!
I hate reading,but I have a new favorite Author. This is Damon btwz :)
I love your characters, and your talent for detail. This was a good way for me to spend a rainy, lonely afternoon. Thanks for the orgasm :)
I really like this story. It's really too bad you never posted any more. You must have created more stories, even if it's just the characters and situations rolling around in your mind. Share them with us :)
You've got some pacing problems. Somewhere in here there's a much longer story that you rushed through and then didn't finish.
I know it's been a few years, but try again. You've got a story to tell... this just wasn't quite it.
Hot story. Loved the character's name. I'm an author too. Check out my stuff.