All Comments on 'Catching a Thief'

Holy Shit... If that was you're first submission you hit it out of the park... Awesome!!! Excellent storyline and start to finish!

You did a wonderful job at developing their personalities without falling into obvious pitfalls along the way. The tempo was perfect. I'm waiting for more...

A unique idea for a story and I liked the theme. Some of the conversation was a little strained or maybe stilted. Both characters had similar ways of speaking, which is a hard thing to get around when one person is writing both sides of the conversation. But I liked it. Definitely one of those fantasies I could entertain! Keep writing!

Not over the top with some quality adverbs. You could feel what they were feeling. Part 2?

She should be in jail, fucking for time in the yard

but he did catch lightning in the buff, TK U MLJ LV NV

Fantastic story with good amount of tension. Need part 2 to see what happens next and for the unfolding of Erin's background story.

Great dialogue and story progression.