All Comments on 'Cedric?s Naked Foundling Ch. 2'

You have a good outline in this story. Please take this comment as it is meant from another writer. What you have is good, bordering on great.

The only issue I have is that it is either too rushed or to slow. You need to find a good pace and keep it there, no matter how long it makes the story. It seemed to me you edited out much of the detail to get to the "Good parts". Sometimes those details make the good parts better. Anyway, keep up the good work and strive to make it great

I enjoyed that very much

wonder ful gives you hope that maybe the world isnt all bad

... then collapsed. Rich, James Bond time, guns, money and a big cock. How original. Like 98% of the stories, except this one collapsed in on itself into a boring narrative of the rich and shameless.

A very touching story and with a good ending too.

Well worth 5 Stars !