by Jena121
A potentially good storyline but too condensed leaving too much detail out of the middle of the story. 4/5
Having read a few of these now, this is about the most head-shaking submission. Have a bit of regard for your unfortunate readers please.
You're just using a new pair of names and muddling the setting a bit then giving us the same drivel time and again. What's next Bobby & June then Stan & Muriel etc etc?
Spare us please.
i really hate when writer only give us the middle of the story omitting the begining and end. this could have been a good story if it had been finished and if there was a proper begining. as to one comment about the so called surprise endding what surprise it's in the incest area we know it has to be a relative. please delete this story then rewrite it and include the missing begining and end then and only then will it be worth reading.
DBRS
A well told tale. Not too short for this type of story whose appeal lies in it's good erotic descriptive passages and the unexpected twist at the end.
It was very well done, a little longer would have been better, but it's still pretty good.
It's a good story, but it could use a little more information as what was going on. I did enjoy reading it though....Rich
A little too short for what should have been a complicated story...sometimes, more actually is better.