All Comments on 'Cheating'

Hope hubby walks in and in a fit of rage blows them both away. Bet he wouldnt do a year! Might try this one on Lit, "Yesterday's Gone". The woman is pure gutter trash, the interloper isnt even trash, he is ruining two homes. The gene pool would never miss the two of them.

Nice story! Thanks for taking us on a trip through a cheater's mind.

PW

Very sensual story. Infidelity is not okay but this story isn't asking it to be. Regardless of right or wrong, the beat of infidelity goes on and probably always will. This was a very erotic glimpe of a day in the life of two who choose to cheat.

Well done!

Sexy story capturing the thoughts and feelings of cheating. This is how the fantasy goes not the reality. They fuck and never get caught no one gets hurt. But, of course this is just fantasy.

but fiction needs a plot to be more than imagery.

This is a very well written cheating fantasy. Why fantasy? Because even if it were a true report, it still is a fantasy, a willful exercise of self delusion, very pleasurable of course (for now).The nature of the delusion is in the temporary escape it offers from ones own life platitudes, uncreative life style and most likely the unbearable recognition of ones own mediocrity. Where do you escape from that? How do you correct wrong life long

decisions or lack of courage to face and truly correct what is missing in ones life? <P>

Instead, the cheaters escape into that game which gives them the ‘make believe’ sense of ‘all powerfulness’; adventure; invisibility; supreme cunningness; “harmless” release of hostilities and aggressions on unknowing and trusting spouses, friends/neighbors. <P>

I actually had a secondary level of pleasure in reading this. I said to myself: ‘enjoy your little scheme dear fools. As you do it you write with your own hands the price and the punishment which will come, no doubt, by no others then by you! The very sweet tasting cheating desert you are having now is also the poison potion for the rest of your lives, have some more deserts? <P>

One day a tired mom (Especially with young crying babies) will whisper her lover’s name -just a slip of tongue of course. One morning a rushed departure by unexpected visitor will leave hidden evidence just where a wandering eye of a returning husband could suddenly see it. One afternoon a husband might get a note at his office from his friendly neighbor from church, the one who never had any children, in which she would ask him if he knew that his neighbor and his wife have taken to have extended siestas of late. It would be a bad coincidence if hubby would take the increasingly popular course in corporate world which teaches reading specific body and facial involuntary signs of pressure when lying…<P>

Perhaps these two and their spouses are developed enough for some, but I found them hollow. Why would I care about either of them? In the story he is a detached dick and she... I have no idea about her.

The potential is present, but unfulfilled, in your story IMHO.

Writing in first person is almost always a mistake but it's a trap many writers fall into. This story illustrates why. Using first person gives the writer the ability to weave huge amounts of emotional context into the story but, if one doesn't do that, it leaves the reader feeling more remote and disassociated from the action than if the text had been done in third person. It leaves the reader with a sense of distaste and frustration at an unfulfilled promise from the writer.

Is everyone here so incredibly narrow? Is only one genre acceptable? This is a wonderful fantasy and the setting is very effective. I'd love to see more of this!

This one needed more of a plot. You seemed slightly rushed in this one Not all of them can be short and sweet like your writing in Decadence. In that story you really pulled off a great shot erotic story. Still this story is very good and I enjoyed it. I guess it's just tough when the better story comes first and a slightly lesser story has to be compared to it.

Additionally I agree with Profwriter. Something bad happened to the anonymous commentor with regards to a relationship.

In Funk&Wagnals 1945 Practical Standard Dictionary,cheating is listed as the action to Deceive or Defraud in a Bargain,To impose upon,delude,to beguile,to escheat,to mislesd,a sham.These are all words and terms that someone would use to identify a person of low character.Why would an author make a hero out of 2 cheaters?I guess that the author must aline themselves with the cheaters.It all ends the same way,no matter what you call it.Cheaters never win and authors who write about and support their point of view,finish with low scores and poor rateings.

The well written aspect gets a reduction from 100 to a 25 due to the shitty content with low life people - their cheating and cuckolding with the writers imbelished sick decadance.<P>

What place does a baby have in such a pitifully intentional disrespectful story? Please explain the purpose besides the opportunity to worsen the already dispicable excuses for a recent mother and her absurdly crude neighbor.<P>

And the purpose of this story was what again? It was such a turn off with these well described assholes that it was a waste of talent done with vigorous sordid intent.<P>

You have chosen to be on a roll with disgusting characters and subjects so it is little wonder that but a few sickos evidence an interest in your efforts. You have a worldwide audience to wow and you serve up crap - why?

it floats back and forth between present and past tense.

Pick a horse and go with it.

(Try a volunteer editor.)

Billy

Both of you cheating assholes, beware! I am now on to you, and your deaths are only moments away! I am using double ought buckshot in this shotgun, and this is going to be messy, messy messy!! But, you two deserve to rot in Hell together, so smile big for the camera!! Bye bye now !!!

Both of you cheating assholes, beware! I am now on to you, and your deaths are only moments away! I am using double ought buckshot in this shotgun, and this is going to be messy, messy messy!! But, you two deserve to rot in Hell together, so smile big for the camera!! Bye bye now !!!

Both of you cheating assholes, beware! I am now on to you, and your deaths are only moments away! I am using double ought buckshot in this shotgun, and this is going to be messy, messy messy!! But, you two deserve to rot in Hell together, so smile big for the camera!! Bye bye now !!!

Unlike someof the assholes listed here, I don't give a crap about their being so offended by cheating. Cheating was listed on the content. If they didn't want to read about it, they should have picked another story! I personally think it was a good story and tells of what really goes on behind closed doors. Maybe some of the assholes have cheating spouses and they don't want to think about it..Well, give me a choice between a married woman and a single woman and I'll take the married one anytime. They mostly are sonesome and deprived by their spouses and are really good at getting satisfaction!! I'll give it to them!!!

We have a choice to read these stories are not. Some of you assholes seem to forget that you came to this site for adult entertainment. That's what in a sense it is. You want to leave your negative comments and tell them what a bad person the writer is. You don't have to read the stories. I suspect that most of the people that leave a negative comment doesn't have any kind of sex life. They like to read these stories because they see themselves as one of the characters in the story. Wolves run in a pack, when one reader leaves a negative comment it is usually followed by another assholes's negative comment.

Just wanted to express my wish that demented hand jerking outbursts which produce multiple identical feedbacks should automatically be reduced to one comment only. Take for example the triple(!) identical messages by Anon from Texas. That angry reader would have killed three times each of this story's two fictitious characters. Mr. Anon, have you forgotten to take your anti seizure meds, on top of your regular anti psychotic ones? And don't we hear of enough excecutions coming from Texas as it is?

You have not cheated on anyone because you are not promising anything at the present to contradict what you are doing. You are hot for each other and God had made you in such a way that her pussy and your cock are reaching mutual enjoyment over and above what you previously promised to others.

When the baby cries it is obvious that it is time to make a new baby so that she is often too pregnant to fuck with much lust involved. Lust is often replaced with love when there is a big belly.

You fucking assholes I don't care what category this piece of shit is in it's a fucking jerkoff tale written about two low-life cheaters who hopefully live in Illinois and get arrested for adultery and go to jail and lose everything they care about. Maybe they should both die of aids or one of those new viruses where there isn't a cure. Fuck you author for writing this crap.

How cheating can be in erotic coupling? Nothing erotic in there! More cheating with the child in the house!!! Was the child from her husband or her lover? I think the story ended because the lover was found dead in a ditch...1*

you offset the asshole annony.