All Comments on 'Chicken'

I personally doubt that the grandmother would have said that a baby must be born within nine months - A year minimum to allow for the unexpected.

Janet pre-marriage was demanding and domineering with questionable motives. Her behaviour on the honeymoon was despicable and disgusting. I know she was drugged once but all the rest was on her.

Thanks for the offering.

What a mess.

I liked most of it. it was a wild story or ride thru it. doubt it would really happen in the real world . some of the story did not add up. and that prenup and inheritance set up by grandma just did seem realistic. the terms were crazy, to say the least all for 10 million. and Janice behavior on her honeymoon was beyond the pale. drugged once and she becomes a sex maniac.

I have to agree with Mickey and two other commentators the demand for a baby in nine months after the honeymoon was absurd. They should have demanded tests of his sperm and organized an around the world one year honeymoon. On the other hand her need to get pregnant was probably the first thing in her mind. I wonder where the brothers thought they could arrange another suitable victim or were there a lot of crazy grandmother around? TU S

It started to go wrong when Hubby/Narrator mentioned Sweetie's useless college major! Complexity is piled on top of complications, apparently for their own sake! The bad guys are too bad, and the good guys are too good.

It was an interesting 'guilty pleasure' to read, but will NOT get re-read!

3.3 = 3*

The extramarital fun is for a sexual majority husband to get rid of the cheating wife to change her to a better woman and it may be a revenge against the lover(s) and the cheating wife. This story matches the extramarital fun for the sexual majority husband so 5*****.

And then commissioner Gordon came in and told me Batman needed my help

And then Miss January came in and swore she would not pose nude unless I gave her permission

And then President Obama came in and asked me to take over the oval office

And then I found out I had won the mega millions lottery but I was beat up by three homeless women that took my ticket - I cried like never before

And then everyone in the country sent me a penny when they read my sad tale and I became a billionaire - Bill Gates came to the room and asked me for a loan with a sheepish grin

Everybody loved me and i cried until the paperboy said "grow a pair god-damit!"

The dirt bag drugged the bride to get into her pants the first time. That would have been how the brother would have succeeded when it was his turn. Need to read closer and spot the little things.

but still better then a sicko story.

This sick attempt at writing a cheating wife story has all the appeal of a barf bag. But even that will excite praise from the BTB psychotics. And so it goes

Well done. I enjoyed it.

Thanks for the very entertaining story.

Nicely written and entertaining! Reminds me of "Honeymoon is Over" by curious2c

this is what I mean by the phrase "man haters". She cheats on the honeymoon and you really think he would have cried or for that matter even cared if anything happen to that whore.

Great Job, Well written, very quick pace, but still rich with details. Very entertaining

You went out of your way to portray the wife as a good digger....and for what? So that in no less than 9 months from marriage, she inherits 10mill? Pregnancy is 40 weeks, that is about 9 1/2 to 10 months. Second, there is never a guarantee that she would get knocked up after the first go around, so your "conditions" are idiotic. Throw in the pathetic plot devices and all I can say is: you are a horrible writer and I hope you never write another story.

get em dog. but next time you gotta quit sugar coating it.

I liked the story--simple and to the point.

There is one word to describe Janet. She's a cunt. Not the sex organ but a state of being. Fucking cunt. She deserved more retribution. However it was excellent that the unknowing groom fell in love with the cunt's sister Debbie who was a worthwhile and wonderful woman who cared for him in his time of need. It's nice to see that the good people wind up together and are happy. Thanks for the tale.

Good tale of conniving misdeeds.... But i imagine an annulment is what would have happened ... Whatsay the lawyers?

Zero for grasp of reality.

Quite unusual, too.

And if anyone says:"That'd never happen in real life" it's a fiction story on a fiction website. If you want news, check out the BBC or the ABC.

Stupid slut still got off way to easy but ....

I enjoyed it, and will have to read more of this author in the future.

a load of shit story,like how do you trust her or any of them and "we can all just be friends wedding"? bitch would be picking her teeth off the fucking floor and then dump acid on her face...now find a husband you skank.

totally crap.

A fun read.

but the roof came 1st. TK U MLJ LV NV

This time anyway -

He did get it right - and Janet was probably not as bad as she ended up - she likely would have been a decent wife if she had had her husband first - she liked what she got and then she figured out how to make it pay off and lost sight - ah well fuck her - oops

Good, enjoyable story. Forgot to tell us how many years the villains got.

good read, what happened to the perps?

Why bitch at the wedding wish her well? WWWWwTTTTTFFFF?

Sid your a pussy for that that dumbass ending to a great story!

despite your overdoing our narrator's punishment and suffering -- why have the cops beat him up, and why Debbie's error in calling them in, nothing said about that afterward?

With the marriage never consummated, he should have just gotten it annulled.

Nice story with happy ending but not porn- belongs in another forum not here. A story where he happily was watching his wife cheat or set it up himself is what belongs here.

pretty bad.

.....to a Fairy-Tale ending !!

...I'm a sucker for these sort of stories...

Thanks Sid for a good story.

This was better written than The April Fool.

You have this thing for beating down the men. That happened in both these stories. Some of it is not credible. Now, I don't mind the men being beaten down, but I like for them to actually stand up on their own. Here...it was lawyer man and dad in law and Debby who picked him up. Frank and Doberman in the last one.

And while I don't think men are stones, there is an excess of masculine weeping here. I prefer a bit of stiff upper lip myself.

But these are personal taste issues.

There is a strong odor of greed pervading this tale. All of the characters seem to be coated in the stench of avarice. It is so unappealing that it pushed this reader back from the story to a distance where concern for any of the characters was lost.

badly written. stupid. boring. and the mc is a wimp, he does nothing but cry and wait for other to resolve things for him.

in some shape,way or form, this story was somebodies reality, somewhere in the world.

so many people after marrying have often pondered on the realization "i married the wrong sister/brother"

a funny anecdotal ref would be MARTA from the tv series arrested development.. when she says "i've made a huge mistake".

the only unresolved question to this story i feel is,

Did he ever eat chicken again?

Even though this is a fictional story, there so many aspects of being so close to being a rather true story. I like it when an author/writer can write a story that, even being fiction can also pass as a reality story. Good story and pretty damn good writing. My thanks for sharing this with people here.

oh btw I gave it 4 stars if it matters to you at all lol.

Ones first reaction is the just couldn't happen. Then again, maybe it could.

She-it man! This story is Fantastico, Magnifico! And it's pretty good too! I enjoyed it heaps! Love you all! GREG. OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

Why did the sleazebag happen to pick this couple to use the poison? How did he know exactly where the couple where staying? If she was drugged only once, why did she act the way she did? She brought the dick to stay in her room, gave him some of her husbands clothes, told him about the will and wouldn't even see her husband everyday. The only thing I can think of is that they were lovers all along. But if so, why did he drug her?

This story has been written hundreds of times on Literotica. But you write well enough. 2 stars!

Doesn't seem logical. New man in that short of time?

What the bad guy?

What was Janet's story did she apologies?

To many unanswered questions?

Last chapter need more details to close the story.

Maybe another story focusing on Janet's story?

At Boeing I was working as a Manufacturing Tool and Production engineer in a division called "MRSA" (Material Review and Segregation Area). A young man who's initials are "D.A" got hired after me, dated the Boss's Boss's Daughter,,,married her,,,,and in 18 months was my Supervisors Supervisor. "D.A" couldn't plan his way out of a wet paper bag with a map, a GPS unit, a pair of scissors, and an optional pocket knife. 30ish odd years have passed and I'm sure his gambling addiction has landed him in pleasant company,,,,at Gamblers Anon.

This a Fantastic Story!..... Sure there are Inconsistencies in the Story " SO WHAT "

I still Loved it! ........★★★★★ WOOF!

Oh Oh Oh! I Reckon Jerry Springer would have loved this? JERRY! JERRY! JERRY! JERRY!

NFW! No matter how much was involved, Absolutely NO PreNup, no matter what. If she’s marrying me, it’s me and her, not me, her and her family at the alter... absolutely no Juniors, or other family names will our child(children) be named after, otherwise, NO Marriage!

I thought this was a very good story. It had some very interesting plot twists and turns. The whole “botulism” thing, though, I found a little bit hard to swallow. That stuff is so deadly that, in my understanding, all the research samples of it are guarded almost as tightly as the gold in Ft. Knox. It just seems highly unlikely to me that anybody, let alone some low-level flunky, could smuggle any of it out. Yeah, I know it’s fiction, but that part of the story was more like fantasy. Oh well, still a pretty damn good story.

How old IS this writer ?? 1* of course.

But this was just insane! Everything was over-the-top. From the poisoning, to Janet's behavior, to the ridiculous inheritance. Grandma wanted a pregnancy and delivery 9 months after the wedding? Talk about insanity. And what kind of special idiot gets married to the Sister just after his illegal divorce? Sell everything, sue the Police, sue the Drug Company and everybody else in sight, retire with a boatload of money to an island far, far away from this crazy family. Like I said, this whole thing was just nuts.

Years ago as a contractor I worked with a group of FEMA techs and we were talking about the anthrax scare going on at the time. He laughed and explained why that was a poor way to create terror, he went on in detail how easy it was to make botulinum toxin (BTX) in a large enough quantity to poison an entire water reservoir, all done in your home kitchen. 26thNC; again you are way ahead of me. Signed: BTW

It wasn't based in reality in any sense of the word though.

the only way to ensure that is to get married on the first day of the womans fertile cycle and hope the baby is born early

That or have a medically unnecessary c section and forcibly deliver the baby premature

Also one star as the cheating whore had no consequences, poor precious little cunt gets a million dollars for almost killing on him and cheating non stop

Somehow m positive comments on these stories have been deleted. But reading again, I still think the stories are great.

In spite of all the circumstances I don't think there is any provision of providing instant divorce without any hearing under any Law! That's the only place that the story got fucked up! I would request you to please rewrite the story changing that part, a quick divorce with a single simple hearing is possible given the circumstances on urgent basis within a month of serving but don't think instant divorce can be allotted! It looks so bad to see such a good story get fucked up like that!

Since the marriage wasn’t consummated, the husband can get an immediate annulment! Also pre-nups doesn’t cover annulments so it would be voided!

What’s with the American obsession with virginity!

I really enjoyed the many twists and turns in your story. Of course all is well that ends well. Thanks for sharing

But like so many other stories here...when it comes to what the slut of a wife gets to feel here in this story...and yes she does faint...who give a crap about fainting...I want to know what happens to her...when her world comes crashing around on her...after all she is an important part of this story...is she not...........

My only complaint is that the virgin on her wedding night and baby 9 months later is very tight from a biological point of view. I mean, within a year would be more realistic, if still very demanding.

Much better than a lot of LW stories but there wasn't enough motivation to suspend too much disbelief for me.

Enough twists and turns to be a spy novel. Thanks, great read.

writing is pathetic and so many siblings and cousins work in conjecture.

Again, a great story, but I hate seeing the cheating wife have a happy life. Losing nine million has to sting though.

I enjoyed your story but have to admit that the same thought that "Words" mentioned crossed my mind. That said I would like to see more from Sid even though its been a few years.

somewhere east of Omaha

The story wasn't bad but it started to taper off at the end not because the ex got better but more like it was rushed.

Not bad. But why not an annulment? And no real explanation for why Janet turned into a slut in Hawaii … IF, as the story said, she was NOT in on tne whole food poisoning thing. So why did she WILLINGLY abandon the guy and slut around with the poisoner while hubby languished in hospital? There was never any real explanation for that.

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4 ****

An interesting story, but really, a court grants a divorce without giving the wife a hearing? I don't think so.

What a pathetic story! Nothing in this story could happen in real life, it should have been listed under Sci-Fi & Fantasy. It is good that this author has ceased to submit stories.

That was an extremely pathetic "happily ever after" story.

Since it has been 9 years since you have written any stories I doubt you will read this but anyways.....This to me was your best story. I was happy Debby and James got together. As far the 3 conditions to inherent the big money 1) Virgin - ok 2) Name the kids after them ok but creepy 3) Have a baby with 9 months of the honeymoon is fucked up, what if she miscarries, what if one is sterile, what if even trying Hard as as they can she does not get pregnant? What I am saying there should be some kind of stipulation covering things like that. I glad that the creep, creep 2 (brother), and creep 3 (cousin) got arrested. It would have been nice more about the creeps going to jail for a long long time. As far as Janet goes she got off way to easy. Sad she was drugged the 1st time but after that she proved to be a gold digging chrome plate slut. Oh who was the Familiar female police officer voice while James was getting the shit kicked out of him? What happened to asshole police that kicked the shit out of him?

pathetic is a good comment, but I did read it all, SO?

Just like the long chain of dominoes you see on tv!

The pat about the cops beating him in his home is obviously bullshit. Everybody knows that they only do that to black folks!

There is no such thing as a virginity test. Any doctor that claims such is lying and breaching medical ethics. Not even attempting to visualize or "feel" the hymen is sufficient because not all hymens are the same. The hymen surrounds the vaginal opening. Some completely cover the opening, some partially cover just the bottom. It thins as a girl ages. There are many ways thay a hymen might be torn, stretched, or punctured that do not involve sex. Horseback riding, bicycle riding, inserting a tampon, fingering during masturbation are just a few ways. Some women do not have any covering at all.

Then there is the "2 finger test" which supposedly indicates that penile penetration has occurred. This too is horseshit just like all the dumb fuck "stretching" stories on here. Sex does not change the female body. Pregnancy will too but you'll note that women's vaginas return to relative normal. There is no giant cock on thr planet that is going to permanently stretch and change any woman's vagina.

Sorry guys who believe in the devastating bbc, just like all black guys are hung is a myth, so too is the myth that black men "ruin" white women for men.

Huh? Janet is back with a new guy 3 months later in the epilogue? Wtf? She is a delusional cheating slut. The inheritance pressure was a crap. She showed no interest in her sick husband after the first drugged rape. Then she falls in love with her rapist and dies him constantly and even goes out touring the island with him and giving him her husband's clothes. The inheritance gimmick is pointless. She planned to keep seeing the guy. She somehow became some mind broken slut. Then several months later she is with a new guy. Uggh.

Thank God this author is gone. She was obviously demented and too stupid to manage relationships which is why she had to write these asinine tales. Dumb bitch

A painful gauntlet to survive for a spoiled corporate princess. Two IT needs are real gamers.

Thanks for a pleasant and uplifting love tale. Well done!

All is well that ends well. Great story.

I don't particularly have much to say about a story that can't even keep the names of characters straight. Janet's father suddenly becomes Debbie's, etc., etc. The police would never just wait for a victim's go-ahead to arrest perpetrators, and the same goes for a DA. If his situation was so fucking dire, the doctor would have sent him straight to the hospital, not allowed him to stay at the hotel. That was just insanity.

Also, virology and bacteriology labs have very strict protocols, safeguards, and monitoring. You shouldn't be able to just smuggle shit out. I suppose it would depend on the level of the lab.

Overall, this story just isn't very well thought out.