by RoseWilder
A marvellous, unusually-structured and thoroughly delightful story. Thank you for bringing it to us - five stars; please don't let it be THE END - it has so much potential.
Great story! I especially liked the part where the sub asks if she may count her smacks.
I really liked the flow of this piece, and want to read more
I loved the dialogue and the style. It lets you imagine what's going on in between *your way*, and for someone who is primarily interested in D/s more than S/M, the dialogue is really the meat of it. Excellent work.
One thing bothered me: The submissive in the story is manipulative and keeps trying to top from the bottom, which is kind of a turn off. I understand someone kneeling in the corner and waiting for her Mistress when she knows she did something wrong, but putting on nipple clamps, and then repeatedly asking to be punished and spanked... that's a bit too visibly self-centered and manipulative...