by Ryan283
this is one of those few stories where a lack of dialog added to the realism.
i hope you continue to write. you have a knack for this.
This was an amazing story, even due to the fact that it had so many things going on. It didnt seem to busy and the way it ended definately made you smile. you are an amazing writer!
Clever! It made me wonder- was this a fantasy or did this really happen? I've rode a train or two in my time and nothing like this ever happened. Perhaps I rode the wrong train... lol... anyway, very imaginative writing. I liked it.
Wouldn't work here in Australia all of our trains have interior lights. But that was a pretty well written piece
haha i love the ending. your stories are so well done, sir. sorta wish this was plausible. the fact that you have every emotion of the character in it makes so much difference. i can't really watch porn movies because they lack experience. you really show a good time when you write. thanks for sharing these. ;)
This is one of my favorites on this whole site. I reread it every once in a while and it's so hot every time