by FINC
For you, this is off to a slow start. Get going because you're good at the sex/BDSM stuff.
I always expect a greatly imaginative story and you have produced another gem. I like the slow build up here, makes it a better story. Looking forward to the next chapter, I'm never disappointed with the craziness you invent! Bravo!
Also, props to you on the writing itself. I know that you said you realized you had had some spelling/grammar errors but this one is damn near perfect.
He should start and finish with the British babe Keeley (wonder who she's based on, eh???). If that young slut doesn't finish this story a ruined whore with her big tits as tender as hell then I'll be very disappointed!
awesome work as always, look forward to next parts
I read this when you first submitted it but forgot to comment.
C'mon FINC - we are eagerly awaiting the next installment :o)
Regards as always - Sally K.
Didn't even get to any good bits. Stopped at cat a hollering. Terrible writing.
Gave you a 5