All Comments on 'Colleen and Nathan's First Time'

This was a great story and you are a wonderful story teller. Thanks so much!

Wonderful story! I loved the characters and the sex was enchanting and HOT.

i don't know what h. h. morants problem is. I thought this story was a very good read and not boring at all. I've read his comments on other stories and he doesn't seem to like anything he reads! keep up the good work and carry on writing stories like this one

Some people seem just to like the "Wham, bam, thank you, ma'am" story with no build-up or literary merit. It's also easy to criticize someone else's work when you've never submitted one of you own.

This was much better than the first posting, but I still enjoyed the first one. I would really like to read some more if you decide to write a series on Colleen and Nathan

I don't know why some of the other comments were along the lines of "boring", I thought that it was very well-written. I have to say that I was getting tired of the "slam blam thank-you m'am" style of story that seems to dominate. To see background Nathan and Colleen really fleshed them out and made the story plausible and realistic. My one bit of constructive criticism would be that Nathan doesn't seem to have had a job, yet he splurged on what could have potentially been a weekend costing a couple grand (suite, champagne, room service, engagement ring, etc).

Nice story. Spiced-up without going overboard with cheap porn crap.

I love your writing and your characters, and the sex is HOT without being smutty. Like to see more.

This is true love, and attempted interruptions of it deserve death as a punishment. All jerk guys need to just die. Only the honorable deserve life. Every jerk that dies means an honorable guys life just got easier. Less competition to have to deal with.

I absolutely loved this story. It was great and you felt like you really knew the characters with all the background info you gave. The only part I didn't really like is the quick marriage you added at the end. I know that they've known each other forever, and that they do truly and deeply love each other since it's been growing since the beginning, but it wouldn't be a good idea to get married during high school and without telling your and their parents. They shouldve waited just one extra month, and it still would've be fine

Not only a great writer with a great idea of human nature. A White Sox fan on top of it.

Your details of what love and making love should be a text book with required reading by all junior high school students.

Thanks again and a usual two talons up. "

I did enjoy that.

Your description of early in the relationship fumbling was deserving of inclusion in a 'how to best accomplish it manual'

Did enjoy the handout (?) to the jocks, may be good for another manual ?

Hurrying back to your other works.

This was just awesome. You took just the right amount of time; pacing is great. But my favorite part is your language. The way you narrate the sex scenes is in that perfect spot between colloquial and formal. Each word fits, and nothing took me out of the story. I was looking for a meaningful, erotic love story, and you truly delivered and then some.

So nice to read a WELL written story.

There's WAY to many wham bam stories on this site......but I guess those appeal to

the double digit IQ set.

You have a definite talent at story telling. Your use of the English language is wonderful and this wasn't he typical wham, bam, straight to sex story. Great job on the character development and descriptive narrative. Keep up the good work.

Too bad our lives couldn't take the shared path that Colleen and Nathan experienced. It doesn't get any better than that! Well-written,with a happy ending! ~ 5+