All Comments on 'Coming Home'

This is a well done story, but I do have one bit of constructive criticism for you. You really should have had someone take a look over this before you posted it... there are comma splices all over the place. It gets rather distracting after a while.

Hurry up, then, get part two posted! (Don't hurry so much that the story suffers, though) xx

More, more, more. GREAT story, we await your next chapter!!!

Paul

I hope you won't keep us waiting too long for more. The plot and characters are very good, but you do need an editor. I'll take a look at the next installment if you're interested.

aaww...come on. Don't stop it there. I can't wait to read more of this one. Excellent!!!!!!!!!

great story!! and i loved the sex in here, it was so hot! and unique not like ur other stories.. great work!!

That was so crazy, nice story

Thank you for sharing this, and the other, stories!