by oohyes
I loved your story and am looking forward to more! Thank you for sharing!
Its hard too believe this is your first story. You're a natural. Please continue, second chapter asap.
very well written - a pleasure to read. not too long; descriptive where it helps and not overly so where not needed. definately a work that should be shared and leaves the readers looking forward to more. bravo.
Yes, Yes! There must be more! The story is very well written, the concept is unique and well thought out. Very good effort.
Do you write professionally for a living? Hard to believe this was your first story written. Well done. Kept my interest and I eagerly await the next installment. Keep up the good work!! Thank you for letting us see your talent.
that could be me done for the night. Messy!-pistolpackinpete.
oohyes, you should just go for it. you know you'd love it, do it and don't look back. time's a waste'n
Pretty hot stuff there. Only negative is your making us grovel for more. OK. I'm groveling. . .
wow loved the story.loved the touching and directing peeing cock.more more more
I just loved this story. What a brilliant idea and what a happy ending. I'm rock hard wanting more.
i have just shot a load...........and need to know what is going to happen