by BurningEssence
Simone and Ray and Julie and Luke -- just totally great! I hope you've planned other chapters for this group!
Good start and I hope you have a number of chapters semi to fully planned. Your writing has great potential, which I'm glad you haven't hit your peak yet, but you've left me hard and wanting more. Your style is very desirable in that you have us readers thoroughly enjoying the story (which is hot) and carry us to the end of this chapter almost panting for the next chapter.
PLEASE WRITE MORE CHAPTERS IN THIS ZIPPER BURNING STYLE OF YOURS.
SMOKIN'
Great story, keep the chapters coming and I will promise to keep cumming er cominig back to read your stories!
If you need any ideas I have some like Julie and Simone go shopping and the lingerie sales staff refuses to take cash or even better yet, Simone visits her family and see where these paths take you.
thank you
mikey
Like I told you, very nice and well done! Your fans are clamoring for more! Better get to work. There's no rest for us writers.