by GUIWriter577
can you make the chapters longer you could turn her into a real slut
Really good start. Could become a great story but...thought she was being corrupted. Seems like she is taking the lead.
I love this kind of story. Sexy woman turning to drugs, liquor, deviate sex and slowly getting more and more slutty and corrupt. Excellent job!
The idea of taking a nice Christian girl and turning her into a slit is a huge turn on. But the drinking and smoking make this story feel more like a advertisement for those products.
Going way too fast. She doesn’t care that she’s losing her inhibitions and losing her health. Her parents don’t care about their daughter. She’s able to smoke strong cigarettes and drink a fifth of vodka -without a problem.
This isn’t hot. It’s just self-destruction for the guy’s benefit. He obviously doesn’t love her. He’s just sick himself and is pulling her down with him.
It kinda defines the author, and not in a good way.
My first vodka was at the Admiral Twin Drive-In. We ended up fucking like a pair of rabbits. I loved it!
Orpheum69
Love this kind of story turning an innocent girl into a slut, the smoking and alcohol is hot. Drinking a whole bottle of vodka is crazy but it sure adds excitement to the story.