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Jackspeed2ualmost 11 years agoBad bad bad grammar.
Bad grammar. Mixed up sentences, possibly from cut and pasting. Descriptions that don't make sense. I lasted 12 lines.
Anonymousabout 11 years agoStopped me in my tracts
Good scenario and strong beginning. Should pay attention to punctuation and misuse of homonyms. Use a proofreader or editor. Looking forward to more from promising author.
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