All Comments on 'Creation's Guardian Ch. 03'

Enjoying this series...looking forward to more...thanks!

Another great chapter. This one was thoroughly enjoyable like the 1st two. Thank you for sharing.

I'm having a bit of trouble getting a handle on the time scale here. Did you mean to write that this entire chapter took place over about twelve hours? Because it seems like the whole transfer-of-power thing should take longer than that.

Sexy as hell though.

I'm really liking this so far. Its a very unique take on the sex genie story type. Its also great that each chapter has so much content. Even though I like 1-3 page chapters well enough 6 pages is a real treat.

I wish the main character had nearly any other name than Bob. Its almost disorienting hearing the most powerful beings on Earth being subservient to a character with a name like that. That isn't a significant gripe...just something that comes off as odd. The only thing that diminished this chapter was the use of descriptive words repeatedly in close proximity to each other. For example, right at the end its the word "brainless". Admittedly this too isn't an enormous flaw. However, I think its something that could be improved in coming chapters.

And I hope there's a lot more to come!

Grat series!!!