Dad Asked Me To Stay With Mom

This way you got fuck your mom more.

I fucked my mom in which I knocked her up then she talked to my sister and me telling both of us she wanted grand daughter or boy she walked up to my sister told her get your clothes your brother going to fuck you get you pregnant got undressed got on top of her mom told ram fuck her hard sister was screaming when she started cumming felt me unload load in her said to her be more fucking you and mom said to both of them from now on us three going to be living together have couple more kids we got big king size bed we been sleeping in same bed us three I take turns fucking them mom had three more kids my sister had four more we had three rings made said we belong to each other like being marrieduntil mom my sister let group black guys fuck them my sister said planning getting knock up by them have black in her now both are doing full hardcore gangbangs letting them cum inside both of them

This has to be one of the worst stories I've read here on Literotica, grammatically.

It's a shame Literotica doesn't permit minus ratings!

Like the story, could have been a bit longer or even a second chapter. AAAA++++

Interesting and nice.

Pretty damm good for a quick story.

I dont know how can someone be confused about dialogues. maybe those who are not used to reading novel can get confused. This one had more than clarity about thing.

Yeah scenes were short but i like quick one rather han drawn out.

As for dialogue, you will get better with time if u keep writing.

I would want to see them go at it behind dads back

The story is very badly written.

And please work on your grammar...

Couldn't get past the first few paragraphs. The phone call between the mother and son sounded like it was was written by an adolescent.

I love the fact that they watched Kay Parker in thr Taboo trilogy. The best of incest porn.

This was not even Bacon. When the reading process keeps being interrupted in an effort to figure out what the author actually meant to write, it kills the flow and the whole erotica concept dies a swift death.

My own punctuation isn't much to boast about but the biggest problem I recall with this one would have been fixed if you had only read through it again out loud to catch how broken and disjointed it was. Missing words and confusion over who is speaking or thinking are some of what I recall without going back over the story myself.

For an early effort, it wasn't totally awful by Lit standards and you do seem open to improving so please continue to submit new stories. The ass kissing reviews should be taken for what they are. If your ego needs that kind of fuel, then fine. If you'd actually like to write better works then take some of what the more balanced comments above have had to say into stronger consideration. Good luck.

Needs a ch 2 getting her bred...