All Comments on 'Day 01: Mike'

I liked the scene of the mom topless by the pool. The pictures of his parents fucking and sucking was hot, too. However, when she said no but he forced her by blackmailing her, that sucked. And not in a good way either.

A little consistency with characters please.

In one hour he went from shy loner to

dominant narcissistic greedy asshole.

And his mother will never, ever trust this little

shit again as long as she lives.

Great start I really hope more adventures are on the way?

Mom want's to be dominated! The least she could do after that blowjob is get her lazy ass into the kitchen and make sonny-boy a sandwich!

When I read this - "I grabbed hold of her head and forced myself deeper into her, face fucking her with abandon." - that's a major turnoff for me. A son should never force his mother to do anything. ***

Son is a pussy & for that you get 1*. She should whooped his little bitch ass.

Ignore them it's a great story so far. Now make his mom his personal slut.

Another inexperienced kid :)) - Ofourse kid with "shaved" brain..

- Hormones.. Young age and imagination - they give just such "shaved" effects!

What kid would talk to his mother like that? GET A LIFE!!! Try to be realistic with your writing and ignore the idiots that think this is good. Their obviously as screwed up as you.

this writer must be a total loser. His writing reflects the kid of person he is, immature and he portrayed his character to be some desperate loser that doesn't love his mother and is so hard up that he'd rape her. I feel bad because this writer will never get pussy, even prostitutes will turn him down.

@boaman007 I'm glad you enjoyed this one. I'm a new (adult literature) writer, so I'm not too worried about the criticism. The whole piece (7 chapters planned so far) will be the real judge of the storyline. Stay tuned for more.

Where is some more of this saga? Hurry up and write. I can think of all sorts of ways this could go. Fucking, anal, three some, gangbang, tit groping any time he wanted. I could go on and on but you know where you want to take this. Keep writing.

1) A father doesn't realize that he's given his son access to porn pictures of himself and his wife by giving the son his laptop?

2) The oldest naked wife picture is 8 months old, so this is absolute proof that his dad no longer wants sex and his mother is therefore desperately sex starved?

If you started the story with your mother fucking aliens, I could accept that premiss easier that what you have given us! This story is beyond wishful thinking. It is immature drivel!

More Please..

This is a story about a son raping his mother. What are you, 14 years old? This is pure rubbish.