All Comments on 'Dear Mother'

Delightful little story. I hope you plan to do a follow up.

Boyd

I like the way you are telling the tale from a different

perspective. Your writing just keeps getting better.

There is so much good about this story on so many levels.

The characters are engaging only I had yearned for a bit more description. I could not picture them. Yet, the dialogue was real and true. It not only sounded like something teenagers were say but also how '50's teenagers would talk.

The details were great. I remember those old Chrysler cars with their push button transmissions.

You had suspense and intrigue and even though the plot was a bit transparent, it still held my interest.

Excellent story and very nice how you weaved it all together without losing the reader.

Boyd is right a follow up is called for.

There is some sort of site glitch, or maybe it's my own computer, but I read page 1, then page 2, but when on page 2 -- you don't have the option to select the final page of this installment. I was left thinking it just cut off. Then I returned to page one, and saw I could click page 3 from there. Anyway, just a little oddity.<br><br>

The story had nice pacing, and I actually thought that maybe his mom was doing housework or something for this couple, and was embarrassed to tell her husband or son about it. Um, maybe I'm still naive! <br><br>

Then when it turned out she was having an affair, I was sad, then even more sad to recall the "good old days," when women often didn't have anything in their names at all. It was all the husband's property, and the wife was only there on sufferance.<br><br>

I'll be looking for future installments to see if the son is able to track down his mom and find out how she is getting along fending for herself.

great story thank you

I agree with Bostonfictionwriter: this little non-erotic story has quite a bit of layers to it. <p>

Until the big breasted step-mother started sticking her big breasts out, telling the young man how she had hookwinked the poor bastard and how he started turning on his wife, making her life miserable, I was just thinking ---- especially how the young man started off with the observation that he and his mother had never gotten along and he's not sure why? ---- the cheating wife was just that. <p>

Towards the end of this installment, however, and with her letter to her boy, we understand what a woman she was. And she willingly admitted to her own frailty about committing adultery. And yet, even though she's casted to the wind, she actually felt more sorry for the man she had the affair with than for her own well-being, all alone, 40 plus, in those years,,,, when that would almost doomed a woman for sure... <p>

But the author allowed the woman to project her deep love for her son, a young man who was not grown enough to understand life's many treacheries, as well as her resolves to never hurt him, if he truly never wanted to find out why she did what she did (even if for the wrong reason),,, <p>

Great story. Many many times better than a dozen of the other "erotic" where we read/see nothing but big cocks going in and out of a poor white woman's body, a woman who screams like she's a stuck pig from beginning to end of a 2 page so-called story....

An interesting look back to the morality (or lack thereof) of the mid-20th century.

Well written and very engaging. Kid detectives usually miss the subtle things.

Not your usual Literotica tale, but who cares. It was great! I was thoroughly entertained. One small thing that I noted: In the mid-fifties, delivery vans were used only by the dairies, and bakeries to make their home deliveries. Most grocery stores used sedan deliveries (station wagons with no back windows or back seats. Anyway, I'm looking forward to a continuation of this one... Harry.

Aren't you something !!!! Very entertaining and set well in that era.<P>

Nice Work Author - You are appreciated.<P>

With Very High Regard

I doubt very much that teens of average or above level of intelligence talk or have ever talked like the one in this story. This supposedly ‘era feature’ had in fact quite an eroding effect on me throughout the story. I simply could not figure out why was this teenager made to appear so slow. It was never mentioned that he was slow or borderline retarded, yet the narrative comes across- unnecessarily as such. It’s a shame because the build up of the plot itself despite and not because of the presentation was both charming and captivating. I just wish the narration work would have been put into more credible voice of a teenager of the time – just because they may have been awkward with girls it does not follow that their thinking was impaired…

Congratulations. Wonderfully entertaining story. It reads like a throw back to the old Hardy boy stories I used to read as a kid. Thanks for writing it. Can't wait until the next chapter reveals the antics of the dynamic duo from high school.

60 year old George

OMG, what a twist, it seems that the mother was more victim than fiend, and hell, the new slut wife got away with all the plotting of separating this family... The mother probably knew that her husband was being unfaithful. She was lonely and vulnerable, abused mentally by her husband. I hope the son finds his mother. Poor kid, now he knows that his father had feet of clay...please, author, this story begs for a continuation.

The spider was waiting outside the home the whole

time! There is always a strong argument for not getting

involved in other people's affairs.....

How in hell are those shitheads bypass webmasters safety is beyond me. Maybe they should be revised. How would call writer whom continuously rating its stories at 5* ? Dishonest? Mentally challenged? Certainly,and more. This one is pure 1* !

Why does he think it might be innocent?

His father asked her about her day, and she LIED!

If it was innocent, why not tell her husband?

And why doesn't HE tell his father about seeing her car there?

Okay, a couple of thoughts -

So his father was cheating; that still doesn't excuse his mother cheating, especially where she didn't KNOW he was cheating.

I realize it was a different time, but even before he found out about his father's affair, why should he shut his mother out of his life?

...whipsawed by two brilliantly scheming women of evil intent. Who took the poor fellow for a ride. Come to think of it, if that is true, than Edwin Robinson is also a tragic victim of the villianesses scheme!

So it must mean that Jeanine, Helen, Mrs. Robinson all conspired together to corrupt and destroy the lives of the two men! Indoubtably!

Wait a minute! It was Penny's idea to send the incriminating letters. That must mean that she also is a member of the Coven of Evil Women, looking to get her poisonous claws into our innocent pro-hero Ron.

This seems to be the general consensus among most of the previous commentators to this story. That innocent men are easily seduced by the Scarlet Temptress of Harlotry. Those poor stupid males. all of whom are faultless, irreproachable in the godliness and purity of their masculine souls.

Gasp! Why, I'll bet this coven of witches, led by Carrie, deliberately burned down Jefferson H.S..

Cause god forbid any of the trolls of the BTB lynchmob ever display a coherent common sense or any shred of humane decency and respect for their fellow humans. Not even for fictional people.

As written by the author, Coaster2, Jeanine sounds like a narcissist moron who was seduced by a pussyhound Sam Francis. Who in turn was with all deliberate cruelty trying to destroy his own wife. Who in turn was ensnared and victimized a second time by the pussyhound Edwin Robinson

As the trolls venomously preach, physically and psychologically abusing females is ordained in Scripture and Bible based Common Law.. That the sacrosanct sanctimonious delusion of male domination be enforced with lethal punishment of females who rebel against masculine tyranny.

do not leap into dirty waters/ TK U MLJ LV NV

While it is true that she did not know that he had already been cheating for years she did know that he was treating her quite badly.

He was treating her in a way that was intended to drive her away, so that he could get together with the conniving but dimwitted slut that he wanted to marry as a second wife.

While I don't see what she did as right it isn't anywhere nearly like she was cheating when she had been in a good marriage.

Most of this story seemed a little bland, kind of generic. But the ending made it all come together. I loved it. I certainly didn’t see it coming and I guess that’s why I liked it so much.

Thats a surprise ending. Two wrongs don't make a right but cant blame the mom for finding someone else. Its different having the offspring shut out the mother, ive heard of fathers being shut out for cheating but never the mother for the same act.

Well written and ended just like it should have, Thank you! 5 BIG FAT FLUFFY STARS!

3 stars - just another average BTB story with a little twist adding the husband

Like the Penny and Ron detective agency. Setting of 1957-58 brings back memories (?) of a simpler, happier lifestyle. Will be interesting about Mom, Ed (and his ex-wife) and your Dad.