All Comments on 'Dee's Story'

You are truly gifted...more please.

One small suggestion, don't use the word "whilst" again, seeing it used so often is starting to feel like the sting of the lash! :-)

Beautifully done.

So who was the girl that freed Dee? Where did she come from? Why did Dee leave Chris after saying she loved her? It seems that there is suppose to be another chapter, "Degrees of Freedom" but it's not on your story page. I hope some day you finish it.

5/5

J

"Degrees of Freedom" Isn’t another chapter but a rather long story, which never got posted to this site. You could find it elsewhere if you wanted to.