All Comments on 'Desire Becomes Reality'

You might want to watch the typos. I think you meant "peaking" into a keyhole, not peeing into one, whenever the protagonist views his sister in the bathroom.

Just a couple minor errors, otherwise, nice story.

Not on the carpeting though!

It isn't "peaking" into a keyhole much less peeing.<p>"Peeking" works even better.<p>It's sad when someone criticizes ones grammar when they don't even have decent grammar themselves.

I think that you have a good start for a series of chapters. Please continue the story, and share with us what you have in your mind for the brother and sister....Rich

Very erotic and natural between a clean pussy and a hard cock, even if they are related....

The gentle affection overrides the grammar ( which usually annoys me ) in this story. I'm looking forward to reading more.

This story has possibilities although brother/sister is a long stretch.