All Comments on 'Dessert Comes First'

The very first word - "You" - is, to me, a signal that the story will be totally unbelievable and therefore complete rubbish!

I KNOW that I was not a participant and so that destroys any semblance or possibility of believability, without which the story is a complete waste of time!

I didn't even bother to read the second word!!

of desert more vouples should steam some thong

This is clearly written for a man to enjoy, despite the fact that more women than men prefer reading erotic fiction. Perhaps you had fun writing it, but it won't work for every audience.

If he had continued he might have liked it. I did.

So Hot!!!! Perfect tease and great foreplay! Perfect fantasy