by cowboy109
I hope the rest of the stories aren't as bad as this one. It was actually well written but it seems you gave up immediately at the end. I'm not sure what the jab at the British was all about.
It read like someone who has only ever seen a few movies from the UK, really ignorant and badly scripted. The slang was painfully unrealistic - akin to an anal story about Mary Poppins and a randy chimney sweep - "shine your nob g'v'ner?"
Get to know someone British and get them to edit this for you.