All Comments on 'Discontinuity'

Great story; could use some editing. Your main character is quite a rouge, but a likeable one. Too bad you haven't written a follow up.

Please make a next chapter soon

How can someone with your name write something so sexy? Please continue with this story or at least continue writing period.

without a doubt the best literotica i have ever read. well written, great characters, that are actually believable, and really intense passion and lust...i am just so wet after that last part

I liked your story. What got me turned on was the two of them dry-humping each other in the kitchen while Ann was in the bathroom. So close to being caught gave it that extra excitement level. Too bad you didn't work some of that tenseness into the final bedroom scene. The way it was told it doesn't sound possible that Ann would sleep through all that noise. But, it's just a story...or is it?