All Comments on 'Do Unto Others'

And the Boss Hoss of LW has another winner.

But, did I miss last weeks? You mentioned what happens in Vegas, but I couldn't find that one by you.

Loved the comedic double speak of the cheating mate in fiction. Not quite as funny coming from politicians or mates IRL. There might be an author who writes aforementioned ' double-speak' better then Stang but I don't know who it is!

The ending was a scosh jumbled though the FBI twist was excellent. The journey was a wonder to behold . I could complement any number of story telling facets but will leave that to others. Slam Dunk 5 star Read !

SS has many variations up his sleeve. His hero keeps most of his CV up his sleeve and we only see that the gals manage to screw up his mind.... But he is still working behind the scene. Obviously there had to be a lot of hidden work to bring the AG into it... in a timely manner too.

You know it takes a while for the people to get around to commenting with the stories being so long. Many thanks to SS..

Ss60 is the king of lw the amount pf stories he can put out is awsome

Good Job! How you come up with these charcaters amazes me!

Looking foward to the next!

Rob Conner

once again a great fucking story. He got shot 20 or 30 times in a deer suit.....lol 35 stars

This story is a 7 out of 5. Thanks, SS. Lotsoffun!

Great job as usual. You do a wonderful job creating believable characters. I also can't find you last week's story. It's not listed in the list of stories submitted under your name.

your stories make no sense they are good for a laugh but truely silly.

Stang,

Yes, good silly.

TFSOL.

x

that had me laughing my ass off LOL

great work Stang

Perhaps it just me, and it probably is, but it seems that since you've acquired a editor your stories have changed. In my view they've become a bit more, well soft, is the way it feels.

Your earlier stories had a more masculine feel to them. It's not that the more recent stories are "bad" it's more that they aren't great.

Some of your early work was, well, better.

Why would anyone write a 7 page story when the whole idea is no more than 2 pages? Nothing is the story is even original or has a "surprise ending"...I think the author's own words describe this waste of time...."Dumb Ass"...

This is my favorite story of yours. It had everything in spades. Slapstick, witty dialogue and descriptive prose, some real well-creafted monologues by Ally on the true meaning of love (just fucking brilliant, actually), good guys, bad guys, and damned few in between, and . . . well, what more is there to say?

Just really fucking good!

I thought this was your best story of the ones I have read. I laughed and chortled at the improbable dialog through the entire first page. You have a gift for language that I would never think of and if your editor is in any way responsible, my thanks to her also. Great read and I don't care if it was a bit improbable, it was a fun read.

Five stars just because I can.

Although I wouldn't say this was my favorite, it was still a nice and fastpaced tale.

No idea how Tammy-Joe managed to become friends with Ally, even through sneakiness and false pretenses, given the fact that EVERYBODY knows she wants Danny back, including Ally herself.

The corruption thing and the ending I had not seen coming though.

A nice and humoristic story... SS06 at his best.

I'm confused... you didn't post a Vegas story last week...!

This is at best a 2 page story. SS06 is trying too hard to be funny and it is a bit trying instead of being witty. This is a bad illogical plot with banal prose.

seems strange the FBI came in from no where. did I miss something here.

By our Favorite teller of Improbable No Not Sherman SS06 :-)

...but all your female cheaters - as in this story - are nutcases of a kind you seldom find in real life. It would have been good to the story, if TJ hadn't been so much over the edge. Her behaviour was humoruous, but not realistic.

5* again from me.

By the way: why didn't you share your last week's epos on Lit? (The other site just sucks.)

AND ALWAYS LOOK BOTH WAY. TK U MLJ LV NV

makes a story from mediocre into the reader choice. TK U MLJ LV NV

This entire week I've been fortunate enough to have read some very funny stories, including this one.

Great job with the narrative. The dialogue was superb and you did well with the character development for such a short story.

And your story isn't so improbable. There are folks out there, whose lives would make this story seem mild in comparison.

Keep it up.

Sorry, it was OK but I almost stopped reading it during the first page. The guy sounds like a moron only interested in his ex wifes attributes. He sounds like a parody of a hick. I suppose it could have been funny but personally it was a complete turn off. But he's a VERY successful business owner. The two things don't go together.

Tammy Joe is a very disturbed woman. Obsessive to say the least. That makes her somewhat interesting but she is also as dumb as a rock so she plodded through the story. She pretty much telegraphed all her moves so there weren't that many surprises.

The conspiracy in the little hick community was decent but I felt as if he was shooting ducks on their feeding pond. It was all too easy. They were all too stupid.

As I said, I suppose it could have been funny but it started too crudely and most of the characters were dopes. There were some funny spots but not enough to make the overall story appealing to me.

another good read, some great dialogue (your stories are getting really good in that department)

thanks for an entertaining read

No this doesnt work that well for me. Danny is Both a fucking idiot and a genius and appears to flip back and forth between the two at will.

OK he is blind sided by his love for TJ. Fine... Got that part. After talking with Laura DANNY brillantly deduces that this was one vast scheme or plot by TJ to trick or manipluate danny into "swinging".

Now along comes Allyson. She KNOWS what happened to Danny

.... how hurt and crushed he was by the manipulations of TJ.

So naturally she comes up with her own little scheme. ??? Even more shocking is Once danny finds out about this he willing to accept what Allyson did.

Sorry I dont get that.

THEN Danny for some reason lets TJ back into his after she supposedly apologizes to him and his new wife Allyson. OK an apology is one thing... but WHY let har back into your life.

It quickly turns out that TJ's apology and her attempt to be friends was just ANOTHER scheme.

But when Allyson is attacked danny ..for months ...seems unable to figure whom is behind these attacks.

now suddenly Danny's brain leave him?

But you are still on my shit list for your last 2 efforts.

Sorry all loyal fans, but What Happens in Vegas was not accepted by Literotica to publish here. email me privately to get the site the story can be found on. It is a great story and I am sure you will all love it. thanks, Kate

A bit convoluted, but overall, very good work!

Funny and realistic in spots. Allyson chains. They snuffed the mans rooster. He was lucky to get rid of the ex. He would have had to roll her off the couch with a backhoe in a few years anyway. The women you really want to get rid of are the ones who won't go away. You know, the the ones who ruin paint and tires and show up when you are out on a date with another woman. The kind who will lie about being pregnant. Joy, Joy, Joy. Sometimes they get a little nuts when they think you are about to hit the door. Love is blind, but there is a joke about just sticking it in a roll of fat. Oh yeah... How do you refit a old whore? Shove a ten pound ham up her cunt and pull out the bone. Thats an oldie but a goody. In the past people have given this author a little shit about his choice of cars. At least he buys American. Remember the buy American campiagn? Remember what they were worried about? Look at us now. One thing is for sure SS, you will never get away in that bright yellow car. Darker colors son, darker colors. :)

and complains about how it must be contrived and fabricated because shit like that could never happen. Then again, he watches FOX so maybe he has a point...

As others have stated the dialogue is fantastic - definitely one of your strong points and the humor is clever and on point. Well done.

You ended the story with the comment, "it was all very improbable." Improbable indeed, but that is why it is called fiction. Enjoyed it - thanks.

i was laughing at the end,and yes it was fun,i hope you still have more in there because i keep looking regularly, thx again, nathan/ga.

was where she described what most people meant when they said "I love you." It was detailed, poigniant and rang very true.

I personally enjoyed the hell out of it. It was definitely a Five Star read!

Thanks for your work.

Very entertaining story that kept my interest throughout.

Just a great and sometimes sweet story along with some outlandish or over the top scenes, that I think as a reader, probably made the story that much better.

Thanks for the great read

Just what I needed on a Friday morning.

Some good humour and a story with a few twists

Thank you for sharing

Got started reading and couldn't stop. I am going to be seriously missing the zzzz's when I have to go to work in 4 hours.

Seriously, SS, you put together another great story again. I enjoyed it tremendously. Keep it up!

I like most of Stang's writing. I do think that he has a few great hits along with a lot of stories that end up with me thinking "close, but he missed something". This one falls into the "close" category for me, partly because he's used a few of the character types before.

One thing that's starting to repeat in his stories is the over-sexed wife who becomes the obsessive ex-wife. It happened in Curiousity, it happened in Cancer and it happened here. Each time with slightly different twists, but nearly identical outcomes.

Worse these wives all fail the "could they walk and chew bubblegum" test for intelligence. Or at least they appear to in my opinion. It ends up taking a bit away from the story when the main antagonist seemed too dumb to tie their own shoes without help.

And don't get me started on asking why an elected sheriff would give a good god damn about angering an equally elected mayor. (think abuot it.)

Still it was a fun story, and I liked the main character and his second wife. Stang is definitely getting a lot stronger with hsi character development.

I do have one request, please no more references to any character created by DQS. It's gone from cute to "parody" extremely quickly.

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Only thing is, he should have been able to protect Ally. He knew what a crazy nutjob his Wife was and she did threaten Ally in front of him. At that moment he should have put two and two together and at least put PIs on both Ally to protect her and on TJ to shadow her. (Money beeing obviously no problem for him)

Luckily Allys Soul wasn't destroyed in this thing and we can have a happy end.

Very good Story, Stang.

P.S.: Even your constantly overrating american engineering prowess doesn't phase me much anymore :D (Though as far as eye-candy goes the GT is a treat)

but so much fun to read. Mixing humour and some seriously deep thoughts about love and relationships. Multiple personality Danny, from pathetic to glorious and a few in between and single minded to downright crazy TJ make this story so frustrating and so enjoyable. Again, your last stories are so different and yet each brings its own lot of emotions and pleasures to the readers. Thanks

"With Tammy Joe, it was like a teenaged romance. It burned extremely hot, but it was full of ups and downs. I was constantly jumping through hoops to impress her. It felt as if I had to constantly re-win her love. It was as if I was under a microscope every day. I loved her terribly but we were just incompatible. We were always trying out new things because we needed a constant source of new thrills to keep the relationship fresh and stop us from stagnating together."

This paragraph, and the next two paragraphs (on page 5) seem to be very poignant somehow.

Stang you should have posted this under Humor and Satire. Anybody that was dumb enough to think this was loving wives would probably piss into 50MPH wind.

Loved it. I knew within the first few paragraphs this was meant to by funny.

BRAVO

Pogma

Go back and read mikothebaby's comment

Yeah, yeah, so your plots get a little outlandish, sometimes. Okay, a lot of the time. Still, your protagonists are always likable and your antagonists are always despicable. Throw in the fact that you're a Mustang enthusiast like myself (my latest is a 2010 red candy GT, only slightly tweaked) and, oh hell, maybe I am a little biased. Anyway, I still think this was a good story.

Far better...great love story. Thank you StangStar.

Together with incomparable style of writing and superb command of a language makes him the very best this site have to offer. I just have this feeling that we are going to lose him eventually, to some Pulitzer lofty heights.

I hope not too soon.

Yet another, twisting, poignant yet humorous story of what could happen in real life. You did it again, loved it all the way through, and as an ex cop who has dealt with a number of small town police departments etc, believe me the truth is stranger than fiction

You have to forgive those true cuckolds that make comments here, I won't call them out tonight. But once again, your the man. I read your stories three or four times before I get tired of laughing. Then I have to go to bed.......your the man.

He might start getting the x-JohnDoe-x treatment real soon.

Who cares? The humor was great,as was your story line! This was the first one of yours that I've read, but I'll read some more. Now, one of my favorite stories. Well done!

Hope your others are in the same class!

Wow dude lost his junk.... Rapists deserve that, but still it's like ow. Great job SS

Top flight, superior fun. Was a little bothered Ally was raped, but when the axe fell......... You are the man SS06. Thank you again!

sure...the axe slipped accidentally (wink wink). As lucky as the slip was at hitting the exact target they wanted, and a two for one shot at that...I hope Danny and Ally went out and bought a lottery ticket. LOL.

From the Mustang Trunk

With no new SS06 story this week I had read this one again.

I have just read it for the first time - REALLY fun -

Just the wife we all want to find - Ally is the best - a true life partner in every sense of the work - a little drain bamaged too of course but it is OK - lol

ocean was to long and hard to follow.

You set this story in Michigan. A mayor is a municipal official. A sheriff is a county official and is elected to office--not appointed by a municipal official. A district attorney is a county official and is elected to office--not appointed by a municipal official.

So it stretches credulity that two county officials who are more powerful than a municipal official are going to be afraid of someone who has less authority and power than they wield.

I like it when they reconcile in these stories but I really like a good revenge story. Thanks for writing. What happened to Bobby was great, lose his dick and prison, too. And the crooked officials got theirs, too! A great story!

most beautiful and great story ever

Nice piece! Protagonist reminds me of Augustus Mandrell, kinda.

that was a tale told well

Very entertaining as always, Stang, but your male heroes always read like dim, emotionally stunted high-schoolkids. Glad to hear Ally got over her gang-rape so very quickly. That almost always happens in real life too! I mean, who would be physically and emotionally scarred for life by something like that? Good to hear it only takes a few weeks to forget.

"your male heroes always read like dim, emotionally stunted high-schoolkids"

I agree with that. and they always whine, can't you find another word instead of using whined ALL the time?

I usually don't re-read stories but when starting this on I recognized I had read it but pressed on and probably enjoyed it more the 2nd reading. I got so many chuckles out of the numerous witty remarks, it was worth the read for that alone.

about the title, but Do It Unto Them First. TK U MLJ LV NV

GOOD STORY GREAT STORY LINE.NOT THE FIRST OR LAST TIME TO READ IT. 5 STARS PLUS

RON

Great story. A couple of very nice people surrounded by idiots, perverts, crooked lawyers, city and county officials. Your usual small town group. Kill 'em all!

Dumb ass.

A nice children's story with a fairytale ending.

not the first read of this and not the last. from humble beginnings to true love.

ccksucker was a real trip and with friends like the shirff who needs enemies.

Ron Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo

SS06 nailed when he gave us the lesson on how "reality" changes depending on our preconceived points of view.

"One of the interesting things about human beings as a whole is the science of perception. We tend to only see the good, in things that we like. And when we're in love it's even worse. . . "

A couple of things bother me with this story:

We seem to gloss over the conditions under which Ally came to first meet our hero. She was paid by TJ to be a birthday sex partner for her husband Danny. No matter how poor and downtrodden a student she was, she agreed to come to TJ's home and, for the sum of $1,000. screw a man she had not met. And again for a second time. And then, yet again a third time, on this occasion she even picked up a complete stranger and agreed to "roll play" that he was her boyfriend at the BBQ. hmmmmm. Women paid to have sex with men are usually characterized as ???

During the altercation in the motel room, the scene is first described:

" When I looked in through the window I was shocked. Booby (sic) was naked on the bed. His hands appeared to be handcuffed to the headboard."

but after "accidentally" surgically severing Bobby's penis,

"I ran into the bathroom and got a towel for him while Ally called 911. I threw him the towel and told him to keep pressure on it, but there was no way I was going to hold onto that bastard's crotch. I'd let him die first."

If he was handcuffed to the headboard, how did he catch the towel?

How did he apply pressure to stop the bleeding?

Perhaps the phrase that best describes the confrontation in the interrogation room is:

love is blind

or

you only see what you want to see

???

it was Laura tht was the paid whore.. Ally hit his car with her truck.. but yea the whole his hands r cuffed 2 the bed.. how did his hands get loose???

~whisper (pokesmot420)

I gave up after page 4. No way I could stand 3 more pages. Check out this one line, at the beginning: "Jeezus woman, it's the twenty-first century, get yourself a fucking i-Pad." Not "a fucking tablet" but specifically she should get a specific type of tablet, an i-Pad. Stang's characters don't use any type of smartphones. Nosiree! Either Iphones or nothing.

Not even Mustangs, GT's or Apple could save this turkey of a story. "This wasn't the eighties." Eighties weren't that great.

A fucked up ex wife that wanted to screw any one and every one but stated undying love for her husband. A vedective hog that wanted what she wanted and to hell with everyone else that was T.J.

Ally a country girl that creamed Daniels mustang and he fell in love with her. She wanted to protect him from harm and jail so she took the reins in her hands to settle everything and it was not for her it was for her husband that is her world.

great story in my favorites.

Ron Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

the title describes T.J Laura was the young college student not Ally that was paid a $1000 3 different times to have sex with him which never happened so she was a paid escort not a hooker. Ally was the country girl he fell in love with and married and she was not going to let anything happen to Danny she would go to jail first. Good story could be refined in some ways but overall good story.

Ron Texas

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

One of my favorites. Would like to read a follow up story about Danny and Aly.

Ron

cowboyridecc@yahoo.com

Well yes it was improbable but it was fun.really enjoyed it 5stars

people who have no reason other than it is a crime to get rid of them, TK U MLJ LV NV

I knew girls in high school and college who were a lot like TJ. I even married one. She felt that she could screw me over but it meant my ass if I tried to walk away. I have knife scars all over my body to prove it. Her philosophy was "I don't want you; but I'll be damned if I let another bitch have you." This would have been a 5 Star story but I almost tossed my cookies when she was raped.

Your stories get more stupid as you post them. Why did this idiot have anything to do with Laura when he found out what the skank wife was up to. Marriage deal breakers should be discussed before the knot is tied. Swinging and adultery should have been included. Your male main characters are not real men with balls. they are men affected by too much mustang gas fumes, and led around by women with a firm grip on their dicks.

What kind of people look for deep or insightful meaning in these stories?

It's bad enough we read them for fun, but to look for some kind of life lesson simply astounds me...LOL

Granted, there are a few who can actually tell a story that has depth, but if you want to find it from Stang, you're in serious trouble....

I worry about the future with this kind of thinking...

Outlandish, improbable, even maybe...ridiculous

(yes, I meant to write it that way, even maybe..sue me)

But you were right Stang, it was fun

You did a fine job of telling this story. Your use of the third wall for your humor was also another excellent use of your skills as a fine writer. 5-Stars

tazz317 is quick to put down anyones writing. He knows anonymous commenters are nothing just a bunch of bullies. He's even worse he blocks anonymous comments to his poor poetry skills. Face the truth everyone can always use help and putting your writing in a forum like this for help maybe worth it. Either get a life or tell the truth negative comments with no corrective type of comments are worthless being Jealousy because they have a different point of view you will not will not help.

Great one! !!!!!!!!!!

Thank you

Hey man! This story is so funny/sentimental!

If I could award you with more stars would the night sky suffice

I WISH YOU WOULD RETURN TO WRITING MORE STORIES PLEEEEEEEEEZE?

Thanks for sharing this Fantastic story with us!

Love you all! GREG.

OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

Most anonymous commenters praise authors and stories.

Do a study. You will find those commenters with names are just as likely to write nasty things as any anons.

I have left thousands of comments most praising stories.

I admit to defending anons right to comment.

I once had profile and made mistake of using my regular email. I missed important personal email in jungle of trash emails from literotica readers. NEVER AGAIN

Good. Fun. Story. Is it possible yes I guess anything is possible. I liked that DJP squared or just dumb ass if . Very good keep it up.

plenty of layers and drama .

long enough to go deep into the story , not overly long so as to become boring .

great characters and plot .

thanks again 5*

I agree with what thi Anon wrote. It seems that registered commenters feel superior or above anon to insult or group every anon in the same category. It's not like that.

"Most anonymous commenters praise authors and stories.

Do a study. You will find those commenters with names are just as likely to write nasty things as any anons.

I have left thousands of comments most praising stories.

I admit to defending anons right to comment.

I once had profile and made mistake of using my regular email. I missed important personal email in jungle of trash emails from literotica readers. NEVER AGAIN"

First, I like a lot of your stories, but why is it that in too many of them your protagonist is usually intelligent and successful and in many cases well off if not rich but when it come to the women in his life, he's a clueless idiot that doesn't know his ass end from a hole in the ground???? The premise of this story was good, as in many of your others! But after he divorces TJ, he allows her to continue to be a part of his life. Why??? So he meets Ally, falls in love, but plays these stupid games before he finally admits he loves her and marries her. OK, I'll accept that! Why does he continue to allow TJ to be a part of his and Ally's life and even allows a friendship to develop between Ally and TJ??? Is he so clueless that he can't see potential trouble??? OK, we get past that! Chalk it up to plain stupidity! Now TJ tries to seduce him and Ally and when they rebuff her attempts, she quite plainly threatens Ally but he clearly doesn't see a threat and does nothing to protect his wife...WHY???

Again...is he that dense??? Now, she is drugged and raped but you don't say how or where it happened! Why was she in a place where something like that would happen??? Just to vague! From the point where they let TJ become a friend, the story goes haywire!

Story was good until the last page

I feel like a big mouthed Bass that is hooked on a stout hook. You hooked me right off the bat and then reeled me in. I loved the story and the way you layed it out. Top Marks and thank you.

5 stars

There is a huge difference between an ex-girlfriend who spray paints 'Wimp' on his car and the ex who arranges to have his wife gang raped. One is malicious but somewhat understandable, the other psychotic and horrifying. Maybe the protagonist could not believe that his ex was such a monster. People will forgive a lot- until they can't forgive any more. I'm still chuckling at the image of Ken getting his coccyx kicked up into his armpit and Duncan running through the woods in a deer suit during hunting season. 5 stars.

You write some really good stories, but in TOO many of them your protagonist is supposed to be intelligent, educated and successful but you write him like he's some really stupidly naive ass-wipe that doesn't know his ass end from a hole in the ground!

Then you try to "redeem" him with some kind miraculous happening where he somehow "gets it all together"! Just plain pathetic!