by H20wader
If you cheat, you are a cheater. You don't get to complain.
If you don't know what you did, you are a cheater. You put yourself in that position.
No wet spot? Christ, ticking dumbest blame shift today.
Moral of the story, you cheat, the marriage is over. You don't get to complain about the revenge.
None of this makes the wife any less gross.
lets the men who fucked his wife and cheat on his friends off without any payback?
He could go to jail for blackmailing the three friends! A better ending would be that Sue is pregnant. Keith says that he will stay with her until the baby is born. They find out that the baby is Tim’s after it is born so Keith divorces his wife and Tim is forced to pay child support for 18 years!
I know you can do way better than this.
Redo it and use proper editing this time.
so he is pissed and divorcing his wife for cheating, but he decided his 'friends' are worthless cunts who dont deserve to know the truth about their husbands?
Sucked balls, I expected some kind of RAAC, they were both used and lied to
Keith is a weak ass cucky boy, and for fuck sakes H20wader, learn how to spell and use punctuation....
Why do you write in such a wimpy manner? Your MC is so weak I was waiting for him to kiss their cocks and give them his ass. Gay men should refrain from writing straight LW stories. You have no understanding of a hetrosexuals emotions, just like I can not understand your sexual emotions. Stick to writing gay stories for gay men. You failed miserably here.
It is a shame that your "revenge" on the 3 "friends" did not live up to your quote from McBeth. I guess Shakespear understood his audience better than you. 2 stars.
Not all that different than the other writers endings…. Where’s the imagination?
Susan came down the stairs in a conservation stopping dress? I always thought that conservation was a good thing.
So much of Susan's perspective but then no Susan's perspective at the end when he finally pulls the trigger on divorce?? It didn't wrap up well, only him not deciding to take harsh revenge was tied up, but nothing else. If you rewrite the ending to be as fleshed out as your beginning and middle it'll be a lot better I think.
Ugh dude why do you waste our time with this absolute sorry excuse of writing. What was that at the end...? No details, no reactions...just typing sentences? You suck at writing man, please never write and post again
Okay, let’s go through this line by line based on how men actually think and act:
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Being restrained against his will has two possible consequences. First, he calls the police, and presses charges against his wife, and anyone who helped her. Multiple felony counts all the way around.
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The second option is if he decides to punish them himself. That’s the only reason why he wouldn’t call the police. That punishment would be death at a minimum, or crippling pain resulting in a lifetime of suffering.
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As for not telling the wives of his so called friends because he doesn’t want to hurt them, that’s utter nonsense. Telling them serves them by letting them know what shitheads they’re married to. Telling serves him by adding another layer of suffering to those who betrayed him.
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Anyone who restrains me should pray that they spend a long time in prison. That would be the least painful punishment they could receive.
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ZK
3 stars. He had a way to destroy her and 3 cheaters and he decided to be brain dead and under the idiotic guise of "not hurting" the wives let them stay married to 3 cheating assholes and lost his entire revenge. And he have all the money away to the wives too. What a brain dead idiot.
The only reason this is 3 stars instead of 1 is at least he divorced that cheating twat.
A GOOD ending would have ended with her in jail for unlawful restraint and assault, her videos threatened her to give him everything in divorce or else they are released; same with 3 assholes to blackmail them. Then once divorce happens, he still distributed them to EVERYONE who knows her, the 3 wives wiping out the 3 cheater assholes in their divorces.
This one doesn’t even rate one star. It was already bad but then the author had to insert his moronic right wing opinions. Give this one a pass.
I don't normally complain about typos, shit happens, but the typos were egregious in this story. There were enough of them that I wouldn't be surprised if they were intentional to get back at complainers or the author has a different native language. It impact my enjoyment of the story and the review score. by two stars.
as for the story, we didn't get the final conflict/divorce experience nor did the three husbands get any on-page justice so it felt disappointing.
Absolutely those videos are admissible. The wife shot the videos, and she starred in them. Quite excellent for a divorce.
Interesting and good work, but you got lost in the weeds every once in a while, and at the end.
Keep on writing!