by kitnkittykat
Great story. Its been so long since reading a butch/femme story I'd forgotten how good they are. Can't wait for more! X
Your story was too short. I find it best when there is some time given to character developement and some dialogue between the characters. I hope that my comments help and I'm looking forward toyour next installment.
Although the story is short, it surely is hot. Keep on writing!
The emotional intensity, the love & devotion between the characters, all was beaufully told with a few simple words. The imagery was potent. You chose your words well & thoughtfully, carefully, & your phrasing & rhythm is exquisite. Thanks for this lovely story. If I'm lucky to experience such love in my life I would know I was blessed.
Taylor
I thought the sensual characterizations were clear. These two obviously love each other & are dying to be with each other after a prolonged absence. The crackling desire & maturity between the characters is evident by how well spoken they are even in thought.
Story was brilliant. Maybe not for your male readers, but since it was a woman loving her woman, it's not really something a man knows a damned thing about in the first place. You're an excellent writer. The phrasing & pace was perfect. The intent of the story was clear from the start. Love the characters & wouldwould love to get to know them. Really good work. Thank you.