All Comments on 'Donating to the Cause'

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AlhazredAlhazredover 14 years ago
Definite potential

I like the pace that the story is taking, but have to admit that the abrupt ending so soon was a little bit of a let down, as the story itself felt like it was just getting started. Looking very forward to reading more on this one.

larry74403larry74403over 14 years ago
Keep it up

Great start, lets see the sister get more involved with th fun.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Great start

I second the others, keep going with this. This is a really good start.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
I agree with the others.

You have to continue with this story. I enjoyed reading it & you have to tell us what happens to them. I disagree with the scores they gave you. It deserves 100.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
strange

strange story when his sister called after he made love to lynne a normal guy would have said "YOU TWO WERE SO INVOLVED WITH EACH OTHER AND IGNORING ME THAT I FELT UNWANTED. AS FAR AS THE NEXT TIME GOES I'LL HAVE TO THINK ABOUT IT IT WASN'T WHAT I EXPECTED TO HAPPEN SO WE'LL SEE IF IT HAPPENS AGAIN" then hang up keep it sounding realistic people do not act the way most writers write

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
No he didnt know that

And no, he didnt know he had to impregnate his sister also.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Keep it going

I want to read more of this story. maybe even have his siter fuck him too, both get pregnant at the same time. Now that would be a great thing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
We need more!

Don't stop now - we need more! Fantastic story (so far...)

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
I agree.

Please continue with this story, it is fantastic & needs to be continued & please do so soon.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
good job

you should keep going with this

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
Please continue.

Fantastic story, I can't wait to read the next part.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
agree with strange

real strange the way his sister and her friend just blew him off after he had sex with the friend and got upset that he left any real guy would have not only left but would start making plans to move a way from the crazy women i mean come on he didn't get to do any foreplay his sister was feeling the friend up while he screwed her and right after they totally ignore him no way he would even think of going back or talking to either of them again keep it atleast sounding somewhat realistic please

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

This was an incredbile story, though I was sad to see it end so quickly. At the very least, even if that was the end of the sex, it would have been nice to have a 'nine months later' scene of the baby and it's new family.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

A very nice story but I don't think this is incest since he didn't do anything with his sister.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
no more?

I agree with the others the story is not done, needs to knock-up the sister in a fit of passion, lost in the moment and nature take over between man and woman...

To be sure this happens but would have been nice to see both lovers with child and milk for the morning coffee ?

Write more and finish the story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Could Have Been So Hot

This story could have been much better. I felt bad for the brother. He basically becomes celibate so that he can help these two women with something that according to them was really important to them. Honestly, why didn't they just have him jerk off into a cup and use a turkey baster, it would have had the same lack of passion.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago

please add another chapter to this I for one would love too see the conclusion to the story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
so sweet!

what a nice brother, to help w/ his sister and her partner!

hope there's more chapters, like if she becomes pregnant, all three start a family, he impregnates his sister, she becomes pregnant, and so on.

excellent writing! very sensous!

rjw69877rjw69877about 8 years ago
?????

Where is the rest of the story??

billyjoeraybobbillyjoeraybobabout 6 years ago
Foundation layed, time to keep building

Great premise, plot and characters so keep going and hope it turns into a continuing saga. Cheers

fromindiafromindiaover 5 years ago
Copyright issue

Please check if this is the original story or some copied

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Too short

I really don't like it when someone starts a story, and publishes before it's finished. I feel like you rushed into the bedroom. Very little description to set the scenes. And you just left it on a cliff, where we expect you to publish more, but I don't feel you stopped it at a proper time.

ToughSailorToughSailor6 months ago

Basically a good story, but the plot line has been used to the point of being trite . . . .

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