All Comments on 'Dragon's Life Ch. 01'

much better than the jack story. i see potential in both stories.

You had a perfectly accurate comment made of your previous story.

Then you go and make more schoolboy errors with this one .

It would be in your interest to at a minimum re-read what you have written before you decide to inflict it upon the unsuspecting readers. saying that do not give up as how can a writer improve if not by taking critisism.regards

its ok. could be better. but you seem new so it is understandable. don't give up.

I am sure your teacher will like your homework assignment but a word of caution here. You shouldn't be using naughty words in your stories until you at least get to be a teen. You seem to like writing and I hope you will still want to write when you grow up.

Angry dragon acting like a human teen from angst and using his mother as an excuse for mayhem? Your other story has a better -feel good vibe, but this story could be like the anti-hero that made Wolverine a Marvel comic star.