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All Comments on 'D's Second Adventure'

by slimpic11

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
This badly needs an editor

"Lose" instead of "loss" for instance. And several other similar errors.

One error is not too bad. Many errors are off putting. It shows a lack of attention.

HeadguyHeadguyover 11 years ago
Good Series

The story of D's discoveries about her sexual hungers and pleasures is enjoyable. I think it would be even better if there were more character development/internal conflict and its resolution.

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