by Jenny_Jackson
Couldn't stop reading because I wanted to know what is going on...
If you're gonna write an earth day story, THIS is the way to do it... Wow, Jen. Duly impressed.
Selena
That could just be our future. A wonderful and thought-provoking story, Jenny.
Your moon colony reminds me of my son's science project last year...to create a living ecosystem in a closed container. A very few students were successful...and years later their jars are still displayed, functioning well. My son's, however, turned into a black ooze. I hope that isn't our fate as well.
Well done! You delve into the future with a keen eye for realism and thought provocation.
When I grow up, can I be just like you??
Wait...why grow up???
The opening might have been a tad slow, but you did a great job of pulling the reader into the story.
by a number of people and I can understand why. A fine telling of a scary concept.
Interesting social commentary, good plot, all around good read.
What a bleak outlook for our beloved planet. But oh so easy to believe. Well done Jenny. Good luck.
Hey Jenny!
You have yet again done another delightful little dystopian story. Sterile, bleak, impossible...no one gets out alive! I was wondering how you were going to introduce the erotic part...still am in fact. I'm still trying to look on the reverse side of the page to see if I missed anything. Nope, nothing there. What a tease! Lovely.
Really enjoyed your thought-provoking piece. I still cling to the vain hope that someday, somehow, we humans can manage not to screw things up. Thanks for disillusioning me. Lovely piece of writing, best of luck in the contest and thanks.
Elle.
of a possible future if we don't learn to get along. If it was me I'd be on that ship. Good luck in the contest.
Thanks for writing, Jenny! Sadly I think your vision is pretty much on target ... good luck in the contest. :)
story line, it really makes you think and of course wonder. What if???
it never really comes to this, but the way it is going, who knows- I liked your idea
I wasn't going to read it till later tonight, but I noticed it was only one Lit page. I started scanning it and you got me interested. I had to start over and read every word. I had to know where it was going.
Very well done, I enjoyed it.
DG