by babygirl1987
Yea, I know that starting with "it was a dark and stormy night," is a real cliche but, I felt it wouldn't't be that bad. now I know. Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it.
much improved over first submission... but I have to ask, by opening with 'It was a dark and stormy night...' aren't you baiting people to write more negative things given the clichéd beginning?
Still, this fic shows effort. Keeping working on it!
Not bad, keep writing.
While you're working on the next story please give me a lady's opinion on my latest post:
A Maiden's Dream on the Eve of St. Agnes' Day - She will surely see her future husband.
Submitted by Abdulbenthere (Romance) 12/18/10
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=508760