All Comments on 'Entrance into incest Ch. 01'

I have enjoyed your initial story. Looking forward to other work if the mood to write strikes you again.

That was a very good story .I would have given it a 10 but the score only goes to 5 . You just made my favorite list .Please keep writing you are very good at it if all of your work is like this ..

Please get an editor. The misspellings, missing words and continuity errors are too distracting.

I love it please write more

Could not finish reading this due to grammatical errors. The words "I" and "seen" should NEVER appear together.

but, PLEASE, use an editor ! Your English "ain't great."

delete and run it through a GOOD EDITOR this was nothing more than a first draft that needs major work before being posted.

If this is the best you can do...SELL YOUR COMPUTER! Might have been a hot story but the grammar is HORRIBLE.

Too bad you can't spell or have any command of the English language. BUT the story was good. Nice lead in and action. BUT please at least run it thru a spell checker.

I didn't think the grammar was that bad. I took the "I seen "bit as flavor. But this had the the funniest unintentional typo I've ever seen "Her pussy was bear" .

I thought that you had to be over 18 to participate in Literotica? I will be surprised if you are any more than 14 years old.

I read as far as "She had puffy lips with small labia." and had to stop. Maybe I will come back but I just don't know.

I couldn't read past the first page as the grammar was so bad!

Perhaps English is your second language? If not you need to take a remedial English class before submitting any more stories

.

I didn't know we went on literotica to check peoples grammatical errors.. I thought it was to read great stories and get turned on by.. And this accomplished both for me.. My boyfriend thanks you;)

every story on this site, i know it is only one person thats going on about the english, this person has an inferiority complex, quit being jealous of everyone on here because you cant find a woman and tell us your name, you prevent

Let me guess. In grammar school you had a pretty English teacher and you kept your writing hand in your pocket playing with your little penis. I assume that you didn't get to high school. You are in dire need of an editor if you really expect to communicate in writing.

Has he fucked any of the other family yet?

Can't wait for the next chapter

liking the ass fetish thing. Big turn off.

Your poor grammar is distracting

Spelling was atrocious. Looser rather than loser

& There were others....

2 Stars