All Comments on 'Erin's a Party Girl'

All of the errors in your story were very distracting. Please take the time to get it right.

I agree with the first comment. You wrote a hot story, but there were way too many errors. Either proof read your work before you submit it, or get an editor.

You dont let strangers you dont know the medical record of fuck you over. At as she describes a young girl of 19 doesnt get drunk at a party without realizing she will either wake up pregnant or with some STD or HIV. It was a cute fantasy but are young girls really this stupid? Might explain how demos win elections tho.

. . . hot story that needed an editor. I guess I missed the part about your being a Democrat. Keep writing, though. I know you must have some other naughty fantasies to share!

All errors aside...great, hot story. I got off just fine, thank you!!!!! Keep it up and don't get discouraged by the perfectionists out here.

Just enough detail and fast moving - loved it, good group sex.

Great jerk off material, but please have someone proof it next time. Would love to read more stories.

I had a good time playing with my cock as I read your excellent story. Thank you very much.

I enjoyed the fantasy of a cute young thing playing with 'all comers'.

Now to all the haters... this was a fantasy, not a manual on how your daughter is to behave. If you don't like it, skip to the next story!

great story....enjoyed it very much!

keep writing!

i liked it, it kept my attention, and it got me off. please write more.

Love stories like this. Was a part of a few trains run on party girls