by story_chikita
Your story idea is interesting but your grammar and spelling are atrocious!!! There are people that volunteer their time to edit stories for authors on Lit. Look for one!!!
Loving this already. Can't wait to see what happens next. Just please submit your chapters more frequently, as there is so many authors on here that don't. Looking forward to chapter 2. :)
It's good. Kind if felt sad that he died already and wonder what lies ahead for Lisa?? Write soon...
Look forward to part 2. Great suspense, loved the detail took me right into the story.
An interesting idea, can't wait to read more. Although I would recommend finding an editor for your stories. If you like, send me a message and I'll look them over for you.
I know its been a few long months now. Please continue, dont give up. Look forward to your next chaper..