All Comments on 'Everyone Loves My Ass Ch. 06'

I am not one to leave comments on stories, but I could pass this up. I actually waited around tonight for the new postings came up before heading to bed just because I knew this was coming. You out did yourself, and that is saying something, this whole series has been great. This one though, like I said, just WOW. There has to be more to come, no way it can end like this, I'm not sure if we will ever let you end this story.

Finally another fine installment in the series of Ass. I love the concept of trust and honor bestowed in this selection. truly Dawn realized the same outcome of...wow....I swear yours and his stories seen to be almost identical except for a huge difference in things.<p>It wouldn't be bad to see a cross promotion between you two, but your taking a break, which I truly understand. every writers mind needs a break, though lets hope some great avid readers give some responses to thrive you to make one last attempt, because we know you can. Cherri-o champ.(I'm not from Europe)

-Acer

Some comments though : <p>

1) Your editor really sucks... <p>

2) AWESOMELY hot. Damn, she is so fucking sexy, it's insane. Bravo. <p>

3) Making a girl hoot, from asspunching her, sounds like a really fun way to while away a boring hour. <p>

4) Please tell me again how unrealistic Conflicted is, because (and I quote) "They're just too open minded and skilled in their exceptionally advanced lesbian acts (not to mention their skill in cock sucking), which doesn't jibe with their age and experience level." <p>

Take that cock, Dawn! All the way down your throat! <p>

*grins* <p>

Death to Joe Girardi!

Even though you have nicely tied off this story, it leaves me wanting more. The people in the story are all finely developed and great to read about. I would like to see a back story about the parents and or University life in the continuation of the Saga.

Anyway, it was one of the Best story series on the site. Cant wait for your next story.

Cheers

Craig From Oz

Quit using my own quotes against me! How very gauche!<p>

Besides, this one's written specifically for you, so of course we've upped the ante on the Fuckbot Suspension Of Disbelief module. Dawn is well beyond those early beta examples which roam the halls of Teen Fucktoy High School. I don't even think Dawn's Japanese in derivation, like your 3000 series models. I wanna say she's...German! Maybe even Swiss.<p>

Precision. Always. Fully loaded, with every available option.<p>

Also, please, you're all about the fuck punching, and you'd love the owl hooting too, if you ever heard it. I included that bit because it's one of my all-time favorite memories of an old girlfriend who used to just completely lose it when she came. She used to totally freak out our dogs whenever she'd do that. They'd come running in, barking at her until she'd stop. They wouldn't bother her over any of her other crazy noises. It had to be the owl hooting.<p>

I just had to put it into one of my stories somewhere.<p>

It wasn't Angelina, either. It was your all-time favorite: the girl who cried as she bled in the bathtub for her goodbye fuck. :-)

Total enjoyment from this series. Now that the edit is done I will have to start at the beginning, not that its a chore. I like the sound of Niki if you are giving Dawn a rest perhaps Niki could take over. Or let Eldridge have her, unless she is getting on a bit for him? Thanks for writing its rare to get stories as enjoyable as this one was-is? Cheers. -- UK CYNIC

Again a nice chapter of this series, I love the way you develop the character of Dawn, particularly at the end of this series. Hope you will add a next chapter.

This is another great chapter in this story, it showes pure love, honor between friends and family, and fantastic sex. This stroy, from the first is so well written that I can feel the love between all.

Take a break if you need to...regroupe if you need to, but please do not stop with this latest chapter.

I would love to see her go home & they continue the "hidden" or "secret" sex along with the nudity & teasing.

It's true you could end it here but dont you also left the story open for more chapters. There is the rest of the trip and Paul returns to Lisa. Dawn returning to Pual and vice versa. Please continue with this series.

As hot as everything was, my favorite part was when Dawn realized that she didn't want to go full-out crazy in the strip club; that it was more than just her involved in her adventure. Nicely done.

Can't wait to read more!

You could have had such a meaningful, intimate relationship between the two and their igniting love life, but rather, you trivialized the entire concept by introducing eight other random men into the picture.

I understand life-long friends of Dawn getting into the fray, though miscellaneous titty bar scum? COME ON, MAN...

Kudos to your attempted save at the end, but doing so after she jacked off half the town and sucked off the other seemed entirely futile, and underwhelming. Next time you go for something sincere, pick a concept and stick with it. Don't half-ass it, then go back on everything you've been building towards with a two paragraph arch.

Your style is solid, and your pacing is great; just stop murdering any chance for a credible romantic story to exist beneath the fucking and sucking.

Awesome story! I loved the entire series and wish there were more!

Great job!

Great story and really good dialog but the story jumped the shark at the strip club. Should have gone another way. Overall an A-

Great story. I continue to be amazed by the quality of the writing on this site (especially yours and your co-conspirator EldridgeinOO)

I had a few chuckles at the Megan Fox references and have to agree, such a waste (a beautiful woman whose toxic personality soon makes her unattractive)

To a certain extent, I do agree with some of the comments about the scene in the strip club with Dawn "taking on some of the customers". The only other way I could think of making that section is for her to look up and see a hurt look on Paul's face (or something similar) and stopping.

Anyway, thanks for the absorbing read.

This was the best story I have ever come across here on Lit. I disagree with the negative comments concerning this last chapter. I think that everything about this story was perfect!

I give your story 5 stars for every chapter, that is 30 total, love it, and lusted over it...and yeah, I do think that is a perfect way too end it, anybody in there right mind can see past the ending of your story, jeez...Dawn gets too share her brother with his true GF, Lisa, and that in itself says it is a happy ending, PERIOD!!! But it was fantastic dialog, very detailed and beautiful, thank you for telling us in all of your words...

my god this was awesome!

i really hope you resume the series, as these were the most incredible stories i've ever read!

Wonderful ending. Thanks for encouraging me to finish it. ^.^

I think that is my all time favorite I have ever read, and I read a lot....

Post a pic of her ass?? just kidding......

I enjoy incest fiction and this is by far the best I have ever read. It is erotica with a great story.

...i've been dying to know what happens more between paul and samantha after this for more than a year now!

greetz,

martin

This is a beautiful story, very erotic every sexual act based in love. Its only too bad it's over. it says to be continued but its almost been two years since the last chapter.

I've read a lot of stories, but this is brillant. I;ve have laughed, cried, been hard, soft, and every thing else too.

For what it's worth I hope dawn and Paul can be together however twisted that may sound.

Its so good pls keep it goiong =)

This is without doubt one of the best stories I have read on this site I have been absolutely hooked I started reading the final chapter with a feeling of dread that it was just going to turn in to a gangbang Dawn scenario but you made it such am amazing chapter and their love shone through that I was moved to tears at one stage I would love to experience love like that in my life even just once please bring yourself to write more

Thankyou for sharing your amazing writing

we need so much more the trip to california and a trip back home still needs to happen

I AGREE MORE PLEASE CAN'T WAIT.

You have completely ruined this website for me. Becasue of your detail and your writing, no other story will every seem remotely good to me. Every story I read now I will craze the detail that you have written.......Vivid Videos could rake in the money by making this series into movie.....

Best storie I have ever read on this site, absolutely amazing.

this time as it was the last time I read it. Please continue to thrill us with your excellent story if it all possible. ace4869

I loved this story. I'm new this site but I really don't see how anything can turn me on as much as this one did. 5 stars all the way can't wait to read more!!

You did it again didn't you!!! On to your next story.

But this can't be the last chapter can it? There HAS to be more, the story has infinite ways for it to continue. So I really want to know when the next chapter is coming.

Wow you've absolutely got to continue this story. The kids have to have an all nighter with Mom,then Dad, then Lisa, and all the rest of the cheerleaders,plus all the college girls come on fire that creativity up and give us more. PLEEASE

Loved this stimulating chapter. ... and I see you have returned with Chapter 7! Yesss!!!! :-)

Oh, I loved this chapter and I was so wet when I finished reading it. I am so happy that Dawn is no longer a virgin and love how she gave herself up to her brother on the stage!! Amazing story!

Annie

Glad you didn't make a whore of her that worked.You really did a good job.

this girl dosent know her power.

My god what a build up. That was fantastic finally. Loved the intimate talk between Dawn and Paul as well as the whole text message/picture scene. That was written with such emotion it was beautiful

POOR TANK, DIDNT GET HIS....

It just seems to be a bit crazy with all the stuff this family does. I know it is a story but I think it is a bit overboard in places. Perhaps it is just me, an old timer, looking for one last love story. Sometime to keep the Outlaws happy but not the worlds population. A bit more personal without the strippers and being on stage. Thought She Loved him.

nuff' said