by BenLong
Great story! However, the woman IS a prick tease....but the guy is about 5 cards shy of a full deck... Be looking for the next Chapter...Thanks for a good read.
While it is not what would most likely happen in the "real world" it is a nice story in which the characters develop and the sexual interaction comes slowly and naturally.
I like the story.
I especially enjoy reading your dialogue. Between your character development and the dialogue makes for interesting reading. Good job.
I'm finding it hard to believe how HOT this story is! And I know it will only get better!
Noticing a few errors - and in my opinion, they do detract somewhat from the smooth, graceful telling of the story. Not bad enough to make anybody stop reading. Brings your score down to an A, from A+.
The dialogue exchange and erotic build up is excellent, seems real.
a skinny dip, or 2, all before a real 1st date. TK U MLJ LV NV