All Comments on 'Experimental Lindsay'

--reading--I was bored

I disagree with the previous post. For woman to sleep with another woman and having no prior lesbian tendencies, I would think some back story and build up are neccessary. It is a little drawn out, true, but I think overall the story is funny, sexy and well written. Thanks for sharing!

Undoubtedly one of the most boring excuses for erotica EVER posted on here! This is the perfect time to leave writing to WRITERS, and stick to your comic book collection, loser.

To the previous post... so you're saying you didn't like the story? lol. That's okay by me. But please, could you give me some constructive criticism instead of this one-handed attempt at a scathing review? I know you're probably very well read and a genuine zealot of high quality erotica but this review doesn't really help me out much. I know I'm not a professional writer, but I am working on it.

... and what makes you think I even own comic books? I DO own some, mostly stuff by Robert Kirkman, but that's beyond the point. Have a nice day.

good story, i liked it, and the buildup was needed, or else it would have been confulsing... thank you

Well different strokes for different folks. It worked well for me, flowed threw and I didn't loose interest as others do. Most just want to go to the good part and don't like the build up. So cudo's for this

Forget all the literary balloonful of BS... and if I sound crude, so be it... the story was wonderful. I'm wondering if the earlier detractors here saw too much of themselves in "John" or the two voyeurs in the later part of the story, and decided to be mean in order to distance themselves...

or not...

I for one would not mind further installments.

I admit I skimmed through here and there, more due to lack of time than lack of interest, but overall I thought it was quite well written. There wasn't a lot of emphasis on the incest side of things, which made me a little confused as to why it was in that category rather than the lesbian one - but that could just be my ignorance. I thought the inserts from the guys across the road were interesting - I can see that relationship developing further, as well as the one between the two women. I would really love to see more from these characters and from you

Well done! Glad someone took the time to write something that was even remotely plausible... It was well worth the time taken to read, and it was fun putting yourself in the shoes of the two voyeurs. Better than the usual one page crap...

ehh, it did get a little boring here and there but that's mostly because some people just want the nitty gritty, hot and sweaty sex. BUT as a future journalist [hopefully] it was well written and the story had substance. something you'd read in a XXX rated Harlequin novel! lol I love the feel of the story; as though I went through the dilemma with you.

Perfectly written.It had me breathing with the two.