All Comments on 'Eyes That Saw Him'

If you look at this author's bio you will see that she is a lesbian form Europe. Normally I would Not point that out but as you read all of her stories the one thing that strikes is that every single man is a fucking idiot. Withoiut exception and in every case devoid of any intelligence.

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Ultimately this story fails b/c the author cannot explain WHY jack would WANT to fuck his lying whoring cheating wife when he sees her in the Bar.

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Consider: Jack sees his wife drifting away. He finds out his wife at a bar ... and sees that his wife is whore. So he decides the first thing to do is NOT leave .. not ask why... but Fuck her as her alter ego ( the redhead) because he didnt have HOT chicks in High school? </b>

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oh come on author. Like I said folks this author does not get straight men at all.

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Perhaps if the author explained why Jack felt the need or even desire -- hello STD?-- to fuck his whoring wife... THEN it might make sense.

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Moreover if the wife wanted a divorce as she claims at the end of the story ...and she had this HUGE business and was making far more than he was ... why then when jack suggested it in the middle of this story does she reply .."NO I dont want one?"

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This story is minorly interesting. The author thinks that having Jack call the IRS in on her is equal to her vile unjustifed contemptable hatred of Jack.

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Hardly. If she has videotaped their Motel encounter she can be in Jail for 20 years and the Video could still go out to all of HIS family and friends. His name would still be mud.

I liked that the story gave the story of a marriage and how it slowly fell apart. Lack of communication looks to be a big factor as well as the fact that Sue couldn't be bothered to spice up her marriage and instead started fucking who ever. I like the fact that the husband got exactly what he wanted. A loving wife and a happy marriage and family.

It just goes to show that if you are going to divorce someone do it with class. If she had approached it differently I would be willing to bet he wouldn't have called the IRS in an effort to cause her as much pain as she had caused him.

Good story, Ignore the ramble ahead of me, he is clueless.

I liked the way the whole story put the husband through all of that pain and humiliation. Was he ever going to get some justice?

The postscript was almost an "Oh, by the way..." which made it clear that the husband came out smelling like roses and the wife ended up in a pile of excrement.

Well done.

No one ever says "I hate to say it I agree with Bullet"... But they DO say that with my posts all the time.

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Angiquesophie, I really enjoyed your story. It was well written and thought through.

I have, but, only admiration for your skills.

My best wishes

Cool story.

While the questions about the story might be reasonable, I preferred to ignore them and just enjoy the time and talent the author chose to give to us. BTW, while I ususally agree with thebullet, in this case, I don't approve of the name-calling. Everyone should stop it and let civility reign. Thanks again for writing. Phil

I don't hate to agree with Bullet. I am happy to agree, because his/her comments on the story and on you are on the mark. The protagonist doesn't behave the way you would. So get off your duff and write a story to show us how it's done, or shut up.

I would like to know what (if anything) changed the wife. Had he been deluded into thinking that this woman at any time was any good? Had she always been a slut who sunk her claws into a good man? Just a user. If not, why did she change? Why did she hate him so much? Was it because she couldn't have children and he could? Why was he such a martyr? Why did he stay when there wasn't even children to consider? Why didn't he file for divorce when he found out she was a slut? Why didn't he walk out of the bar and confronted her? Since the fraud was commited during the marriage, why didn't the IRS ever consider him part of the fraud, especially since he was the husband and a "bean counter?...why...why...too many why's.

I must admit that this author creates the most disgusting heroines posted on this site, for that I gave her a 50, especially since she got her just desserts.

You moved them from point A to point B well enough, I suppose. Still, it would have been nicer if they had any personalities at all.

really good. as usual, very well written. very interesting story. like the way you ended it.

Kudos!

it was still nicely done. Two things you don't do: mess with an accountant or the IRS.

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Regards, Jack

<p>First, I've read another story out here somewhere with exactly the same story line except the hubby was secretly rich in his own right. Guess Angi missed that cliché, huh? Other than the duplication of plots, nothing else is remarkable about this, whatever it is. The characters were wooden and one-dimensional caricatures. The dialogue was abysmal. If people in Angi’s world actually speak as if they were cartoons, in the fashion Angi has her characters talking in this mess, what a pitiful place Angi’s world really is. Angi’s punctuation is getting poorer too. In particular, she needs to get an education in the use of commas. I thought Angi might be trying for more satire as she has on a couple of occasions, but if that is what she was trying for, she failed miserably. Overall, a thoroughly forgettable story. I’m changing my scoring to one notch lower. Just going through all this made me see how poorly done this story really is.</p>

<p>Ron123XYZ@foreveranonymous.naturally

with no name calling. The ONLY reason I pointed out this author sexual orientation is b/c I REALLY think a case could be made that given hwo she has developed other straight men / husbands in her earlier work... she doesnt get straight men. Now y'all may think that my connection in this regard is specious but it is NOT name calling.

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The thing is that I really ... oh I hate to say this... I love reading this author stuff. There is something about her style that I really enjoy.

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<b>You see the author told us in the very beginning that JACK was an "Average guy". So the issue is Not that Jack would NOT fuck his lying whore wife FIRST then get angry... but for me the idea that an average guy would take such an action is UNHEARD of and without ANY adequate explanation... it kills the story. </b>

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For me. For you it may not. and thats fine

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I am really being unreasonable asking why there is no explanation when presented with exceptionally unlikely outcome?

Author - well done story and thank you for your efforts. However it seems as if we are all missing the "glorified bullshit, opps we meant wisdom" from the professional commentator called Alvaron53.

This is an interesting story of how Joe Average outmaneuvers his greedy wife, a woman who's one of the beautiful people who can do no wrong. The author's prose is tight and compact. Her scenes are richly drawn, and she moves her characters through them with fine choreography as we learn who Jack and Sue are. We watch the marriage slowly begin to unravel as the wife moves away from her partner, and we wonder why in empathy with Jack.

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At its core, the plot is good but it got a little cutesy since I figured out who the redhead was long before the author told us. That disrupted the narrative drive of the story, and it made the sex scenes feel like an obligatory add-on. It's wasn't terrible but this could've been better done.

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Their post-coital discussion was well-written as Sue shows her true colors. She needed Jack to help get the business off the ground but, once it's running, her greed takes over both professionally and personally, and now it's all about Sue. Her comeuppance at Jack's hands is poetic justice, and he remains true to his character when he tips off the law enforcement agencies as to her illicit activities. Despite Sue's claims to the contrary, even after divorce, Jack stood to profit handsomely from the sale of the business. But the money was tainted, and Jack wanted no part of it.

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In many ways, this marriage devolved into a marriage of convenience. A good marriage gone bad is the true tragedy here. Very good fiction, angiquesophie. Thank you.

<p>The primise really made no sense to me either.</p>

<p>I mean how many men would see their wife made up as a "hooker", had dyed her hair, watched her get felt up and played with by strangers, had the barman and the guy next too him tell him that his wife was there often, and the first thing he does is go home and <i>fantasize</i> about what it would be like to have sex with is wife? Why would he have to fantasize what it would be like to be with her? If anyone knew what it was like to have sex with her it was him after 10 years of being married to her.</p>

<p>And the fact that she changed her hair color was enough to make people believe it wasn't her? Really? Most women change their hair color all the time, I find it hard to believe that a Judge wouldn't entertain the notion of verifying this before he ruled against him. At least with good lawyers he could have had it entered as perjury.</p>

<p>I have to say the ending of justice was a new twist, but the character seem way to "mouse" to be believable. I mean who finds out their wife is a "call girl" after years of putting him off of doing different things in their marriaged life and all he does is sit there and "meekly" talk to her thinking causally of his revenge?</p>

<p>Nope I gotta go with Harry, when I figured out it was his wife he had to go back and see, "AFTER" he saw her the first time and he went back to watch a 2nd time, I just stopped believing the primise of this story as entertaining and placed it in the "really out there" column.</p>

<p>Sorry that I didn't like your story. I honestly tried, but I just couldn't wrap my brain around why someone would put up with this type of abuse once they were aware of it, and I'm usually judged to be a quite person. </p>

-Risq

I can't get over this lady's skill with the written word. Seldom will you find a writer that can use words the way Ms. Angiquesophie does. Some readers may question the characters' actions, but few writers can write this well. She'd make a cookbook interesting reading.

I think you did a fantastic job with this story. The plot, characters, and writing were spot on. I almost find it hard to believe that their are people out there who didn't enjoy this tale. You can't please everyone I guess? Keep up the good work!

A great story except for one thing... He saw her nude, tasted her, felt her orgasm and fucked her without recognizing her?? Maybe there really are men that out of touch with reality, but I doubt it. In my many years of adulthood I have bedded many women and I would bet that given any one of them in a dark room I could identify them without sight.

Other than that, it was well told.

Great story, not so average after all. He got his revenge, happliy ever after!

When you're right, YOU'RE RIGHT!! Let's look at what you wrote:<b><i>"No one ever says "I hate to say it I agree with Bullet"... But they DO say that with my posts all the time."</i></b> So, Harry, you're telling us that from as much as you can tell that no one has a problem with finding themselves in agreement with 'the bullet's' stated opinions. Hmmm. Fair enough. I would concur. Then you tell us that people posting comments reflecting your opinion feel compelled to state how much they hate agreeing with you. And, according to you, this happens all the time. I would have to concur with you on that as well. But really, Harry, I think you're selling yourself short. Why I'd bet that many of those folks are downright embarrassed when their reaction mirrors yours. And I must commend you, Harry, on taking so much pride in this. You were boasting, weren't you?<p>P.S. Pssst, Harry, you might want to avail yourself of the "Preview" feature after composing your comments.

Thank you for a few fun moments and a tale that should be An Epic for The Average Guy. You made me smile.

Thanks,

Ron

It's not often when I find myself so enthralled with a story's prose that the content seems to become a very distant concern. It usually only happens when I read an offering by this young author. The introduction of her characters was smoth and efficient. 'Alvaron's' use of "choreography" is so apt in her rendition of these two as a couple. Nuances almost too subtle to notice but very telling if omitted seasoned this story. <i>"She had found a little round mirror in her tiny purse and started inspecting her immaculate lips. One long fingernail pushed a delicious dent in the silk pillow of her lower lip."</i> So little conveying so much. <p>I may be a minority of one in my understanding of this story. Firstly, I believe the husband <b>did</b> recognize his wife. I suspect that the author was toying with the wife and us readers. As it has been noted by a number of previous commenters that his not recognizing his own wife isn't credible, I would certainly have to agree. Thus, I believe he did. Shortly before taking a final nap with this "strange" woman he contemplates asking her name. Why? Because he is already aware that this has been nothing more than a charade. He wants to know what name she is using in portraying this other woman. My impression is further reinforced when he simply speaks her name <b><i>"Sue"</i></b> while engaged in anal sex which had previously been denied him. He knows who she is, and he feels defeated. Being allowed a sexual avenue, anal sex, which she had always refused was actually a final insult to him. There is no surprise when he says "Sue." This was not shouted in a moment of passion. It was simply said. When he shortly thereafter asks her why, it is with the knowledge that he had known all along who this woman was. He is asking her why the charade.<p>Secondly, the husband is who he is. Some people scream, some cry, some sulk, some run away and so on. He has always considered himself average and has always believed that this woman was more than any average guy could hope to marry. He wasn't intimidated by Sue per se, but he was intimidated by everything that made her so far superior to "average." I think he was always consumed with the idea that an average guy couldn't hold on to wife as she for very long. And so when she did finally reject him, it was a case of his experiencing something he already expected. He was resigned to what he considered his fate. And when it happened, his actions simply represented what he felt was predetermined. He may have been dealing with losing her their entire marriage. So why shoot off fireworks? It was <i>fait accompli</i>.<p>Thirdly why the change in the wife from loving to hateful. Not being a woman I can only surmise at best, but it may have had something to do with her being unable to give birth. It seems that once this couple learned of that, the wife dedicated herself to her business. Problems they had never had before surfaced with regularity. I submit that had she been able to have children, their marriage would have succeeded.<p>Lastly, I did have difficulties with the resolution. While I have no problem with the wife getting her just desserts, all of her criminal activities seemed to appear out of thin air. Not having paid taxes for the last three years? Three years ago they were still somewhat happily married. I have to believe the husband, as a bean counter, would have made certain that the taxes were paid. I'm no accountant, but doesn't their being married make each responsible for the other's debts? I believe, if only by inference, that she obtained the business <b>after</b> they were married.<p>Alright. For those of you who I'm nuts, have at me. Perhaps I couldn't blame you. But I will tell you this, it was fun trying to figure out this story. This was a wonderfully written story by a very talented young author.

Risq:<p>Just my take but to provide a possible answer to your questioning why the husband went home and fantasized about his wife. I believe because he was watching his wife <i>not</i> be his wife. His wife was usually attired in business garb. This woman was dressed as a slut. His wife was not so overt in encouraging male attention, but this woman was. <b>She</b> was everything his wife was not. He wasn't fantasizing about his wife. He was fantasizing about the woman he saw.<p>As to why he would actually watch this knowing it was his wife, he was overwhelmed by how much in over his head he was in being married to her. You might say he was in awe of his wife. Not the person, but the image. He wanted to know where this charade was going, and why she was doing it. He believed he needed to let it play out.<p>Maybe I'm coming from out of left field, but this is how I see it. Take this for what it's worth. I'm sure most would ask you, "What worth?"<p>Philip

Totally enthralling and well written! IT engaged me based on the premise of sex with the common man and a totally Hot woman. The situation is probably more common than we want to believe but the outcome was almost a fanfare for the common man! To be given the sexual pleasures as a ploy to manipulate and leave him with nothing was almost predictable but to write him as being calm afterwards and manipulate the situation back to his benefit was sweet revenge!

We WILL be reading more of you submissions!

Excellent story!

ZeeCouple

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Phil -we have talked thru private emails so you know I am direct and a no bullshit guy.

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First as to your main point I think you INTENTIONALLY spinning about what I said. I went out of my way to say that an AVERAGE guy would NOT react in the way the author showed... Yet here you LYING about my point... that it was all somehow based on How I would react

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as to your other point While thebullet may not like my analysis -- that is his right-- for me to spend time reading this story then taking the time out to reply... should place me in NOT the troll category.

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When assholes like thebullet dont even bothering to argue the specifc and legit points I made I know I have WON.

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I dont think anyone HAS to agree with me... nor does anyone have to answer my points. All I ask is that if I amke a post about why I do or dont like something and I give REAL detailed reasons... that its gets respected.

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I expect this short of shit from the bullet. I dont expect it from someone like you

this is Just sophistry

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<i>As it has been noted by a number of previous commenters that his not recognizing his own wife isn't credible, I would certainly have to agree. Thus, I believe he did...</i>

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so the fact that he doesnt recognize his wife is really proof he MUST have??

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you have to be kidding me...

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SECOND your entire analysis of the motel bedroom scene is wonderful But you are begging the question. That scene from an AVERAGE guy should never of happen. She should never get the chance to say come on Jack fuck me in the ass.

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and where the FUCK do you come up with this crap?

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<i> And when it happened, his actions simply represented what he felt was predetermined. He may have been dealing with losing her their entire marriage. So why shoot off fireworks? It was fait accompli. </i>

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where does this insight come from? If anyone is making up stuff here its you. There is no hint in the story he thinks he is predetermined to lose his wife. There is no hint he is awe of his wife.

I was pulling your chain, and I apparently succeeded. It's not my intent to get into a name calling contest, etc. with you. I'm not comfortable shouting on my computer.<p>Harry, On one than more occasion I've defended you. Once you were attacked <i>before</i> you had even commented. I took issue with those who "dissed" you. And I would do it again. Harry, I've told you publicly, and privately, that you have much to share, that often you raise salient points, and on some occasions, are the one to break new ground with astute observations. What I find so very tiring, Harry, are the personal attacks, the sexual orientation inuendos, and the <b>SHOUTING!</b> Harry, this isn't a contest. You mentioned that on occasions you felt you "won." Harry, there is no winning here. This forum presents all of us the opportunity to express and share our opinions. I will acknowledge that some can be pretty bizarre, as apparently you find mine regarding this story, but that's okay. Discarding the "You suck," and "Author, you should die" remarks, I find most comments interesting, sometimes even fascinating and informative. There are even particular individuals whose comments I read more faithfully than I do the stories. Harry, whether or not you believe this, I always make it a point to read what you have written. While I admit that most often I am not in agreement with your opinion, I do enjoy reading it and often consider it to be food for thought. Harry, if you are nothing else, you are entertaining. And I mean that as a compliment.<p>Harry, it's important to realize that your opinion is just that, yours. As you want the right to have it, so I too want the right to mine and others to theirs. I won't tell you that it doesn't tickle me when someone posts a comment and references something I wrote in a positive manner. And when someone takes me to task, I have to give some consideration to what they've written. Did I miss something? Harry, I like it when people agree with me, but not by imposing my opinion on others. Harry, cut everyone else some slack. I read the comments of many who you have, let's say, to whom you've been unkind. Sometimes, while not agreeing with your vitriol, I have sided with you. And other times I thought you were all wet. But that's okay. If everyone bet on the same horse, why run the race?<p>So, Harry, let's shake hands and hold no hard feelings. I apologize for what may have seemed to you as hitting below the belt. But I gotta tell you, other than my last comment in that post, that really is what you wrote. I know it's not what you meant, but it's what you wrote. Think about that in the context of what I wrote about this story. Sometimes there is more to the story than just the words.<p>My best, Harry

It definitely puts the literate in Literotica.

I appreciated the brevity of this tale compared to some of your previous offerings too.

I think that this could have been more interesting if the redhead had been identified as wife in the hotel-bar encounter, and we saw him set her up rather than try to make that a surprise.

...I liked this story. I was hoping for Jack to come out OK, and he sure did. Angi has a talent at painting a vivid picture of ruthless women. Well written and interesting.

This writing was neither literature nor erotica, but it was disturbing as it tapped into an inner sanctum of a woman's scorn which touched upon the demonic. Insanity is the only explanation for the wife in not being intelligent enough for the cliche ending of the IRS. The Lady in the Red as the old rock song is but a minute explanation for the husband, but after the minute the hour of voice would have told him this was his slut.

It could have been written much better in the devious wife setting him up to cheat with someone she manipulated as that is more her character.

Literotica needs a category such as road rage or in this case keyboard rage for stories of this genre.

Kinda brings a tear to my eye.

From a parallel dimension - perhaps - again - and again. It seems impossible to relate to most of the writers characters. When everyone is without semi-normal human characteristics and many from ambush one wonders.<P>

The brainless oblique men aren't men and the women are euniquely weird from an angle unfathomed by man or beast.<P>

Yet it is always so well constructed which is a conundrum to making rational sense of it. A British woman writer said it in front of her recent story - "I hope everyone understands that what [she] had written was in the British style [huh] so please be forgiving of it" [whatever that meant].<P>

So perhaps this is written in a style onto itself which many don't quite understand - yet or never.<P>

So that was the weird now to the bone at the end. He vindicates himself in an unaverage way [the writer lied] but only after knowingly taking his whore to bed then finally asking why after choosing to be a dormat for years. Why so dumb after being so stupid after so many years?<P>

It is hard to respect a writer with talent who seemingly has such a consistent agenda as described above.<P>

Writer, lets see your abilities in a credible story of some rational view of life. Is that possible?

criminal gets. She was a very mentally ill individual whose sickness came from not being able to have children. And thru mental transfer she removed all of her self guilt to hatred for her husband and became a common slut.

This is my first time reading one of your stories. It managed to grab my attention with the first paragraph and keep me interested until the end. Usually I skip parts, but, with your story, I skipped none. I found your writing to be well executed; the story flowed from sentence to sentence. As a fellow author on this site, I can only hope that my stories can be as well written as yours. I will continue to read more of your work and any future work that you post.

I liked the story and the twist at the end. But, even more I liked your phrasing and descriptions. You set the mood quite well. You could become one of the very best posting on this site. I look forward to reading more of your work

I don't care for stories with an epilog. I prefer to see them brought to a conclusion without one. You could even have left a lot of the "lived happily ever after" stuff out. It would be enough if we knew Sue was about to lose it all to the IRS, and Jack walks away with us knowing he did it to her.

Anyway, a great read that pulls you in from the beginning.

Your style is just beautiful, subtle, complete. They are stories that we can melt into. Loved it.

I liked your story, I would have liked more detail. Keep on writing.

I can't put my finger on it but something about the story makes me love it. Maybe it's the sweet but simple and effective revenge. Who knows, but I did so keep up the great work.

yep, its not your average LW story. quite different, in fact. none of this "but you're the one that i love", "i didnt mean to hurt you" crap and no endearments too. she's hostile but he is cold and calculating. she never saw it coming.

I like caricatures that are well thought through; the kind which capture in one picture the whole complexity that many words sometimes can’t. I do not like caricatures as a flat two dimensional moving and talking puppets - like characters which do not let you forget that there is no life in them, only a platform to carry some abstract idea, or worse, an outdated and misguided ideology. The wife’s cartoonish character is a monster; the husband is an off the mass production robot. For some reason they were made to be that way, only I could never figure out the real reason behind it. Why would any woman who wants to advance in today’s society need to step over her husband’s body, not to mention the bodies (literally) of so many other people, and shed in the process any of her remainig human and humane parts ? Does this rule of upper mobility apply to women only? Apparently so. Had we lived in the times of the great novels which lamented the plight of talented, yet oppressed women in men’s world (Flaubert’s “Madame Bovary” or Thackeray’s “Vanity fair”), breaking the reign of tyranny of any sort could have understandably be expected to take its toll. So, as they say about any revolution: when you cut trees there is a lot of dust (or are these men’s heads) flying around. But for this story to be written this way today, the term ANACHRONISM is unavoidable. Not that the days of Liberty, Equality and Fraternity have materialized and ended all injustice, against women, against poverty or against any oppressed. But pretending that we are still under the circumstances that would have justified only sleeping your way upward (or resorting to any variety of criminal activity) as the only way to climb up, is a childish play of pikaboo with reality. You need to be of that age to enjoy it. <P>The ending seemed like a patch work, never coming close to explaining the inexplicable love which the average robot (the husband) was supposed to feel towards the monster (the wife). For that matter, the story never really explained why they continued to stay together once each realized that they were ‘sleeping with the enemy’. Both the husband’s “love” and the wife’s presumed pure economical opportunism, seem equally gratuitous as explanations. <P> I’ll admit that I felt a familiar tinge of sadness when I realized that , as with the writing of other sisters to the new sub genre in Loving wives, the writing here is well above what you can expect from most of the stories in Lit. The sorrow is of course on the waste of feminist zeal and literary talent on inter - gender misguided and arcane concepts of eternal war and acrimony. If the author were not looking so hard for enemies under anything that dares to self identify as male, she might have been able to find some allies. The question is: do any of the very very late bloomers (no more than 50 years from the 60’s in rough numbers) have the intellectual and psychological courage and integrity to conduct this search? After all, there are so many real social dragons (including injustice towards women) that both men and women could (and should) kill together.

First, without getting into any of the particulars of the preceding exchanges (which I did not follow), I just want to command you on the thoughtful comments on behalf of tolerance! <P>

On your other comment regarding the descriptive quality of the characters, I’ll say that if I had to rate the degree to which I agree with your assessment, I would put it around 5% to 10%. The area which is a strength for this author is the physical descriptions of women: clearly capturing both the external appearance and the internal aspects of female characters.. Where it comes to “men’s work” namely, describing men, both physically and their psyche –that’s where the author falls flat. The worse part is the lack of CREDIBLE NARRATIVES (I have yet to read one example) of relations between men and women. I would love to be proven wrong, beyond the area which I have mentioned above.

Speaking of narratives, I have a word of caution. In my opinion, while your suggestions for possible interpretation of the husband’s motivation and state of mind are possible, they fall within what could be called the speculative margins of the range of legitimate interpretations. Namely, it’s not contradicted by the text, and yet there is no support in the text to your suggestions. Traditionally, a tight interpretation which does not assume much which can not be shown in the text is considered to be a better interpretation. Let me be quick to add that the fact that you had to recruit speculations is not accidental, nor is it your fault. When the baseline for the characterization of the husband is the word average in multiple contexts, there is so much (or so little) you could do with it.

I am sorry to dissapoint this author. In the United States, no fault divorce is the rule, without exception. Courts do not punish spouses for their actions during a maraige unless it is really egregious (like sexual battery, or blantant abuse). A one time fling hardly rises to that level. The courts of this country would deem the husband's action as irrelevant. Maraige is treated as a contract. Punitive damages or penalties are NEVER awarded unless the breach is done in conjunction with an independant tort.

Sorry bitch, the husband would end getting a significant portion of the wife's money, weather the property is distributed as community property, or by principles of equitable distribution.

In addition, were she to release video's of her sexual encounter with her husband to his family and the public, she might find herself sued in Tort by her husband for publication of private facts.

In a community property state, I am guessing that the husband would receive at least 20 million dollars. As one who is studying law, I can tell you that any attorney who would advise the husband to accept the wife's terms would be guilty of gross malpractice!

Although I know this was pure fantasy, Jack performed wonderfully. Being made a cuckold is probably the worst form of humillation a man can endure. You know what they(?) say? Get backs are a mother------. Good for you jack, you certainly won in the end.

i was reading and just waiting for the hook, to bite her in the back side. it was delivered nicely, where she thought he was on the ropes with no options, surprise.

that was done without a lot of fanfare, but with a phone call. be careful what you ask for, she should have been.

VERY WELL DONE. Might (only possibly) been improved(?) if he had known it was her from the get-go......he'd have been cold as the proverbial witch's tit. In any case, the lesson being (on any level you wish), "DON'T EVER FUCK WITH THE 'BEAN COUNTER' ".

as usual. I love the writing, the spin of words and phrases. A real talent. And for the story, she had it coming. Great ending. G.Belgium

No wimps here.

For letting the good guy win.

You finally let the good guy win, maybe there is hope alive in this world after all!

the author has the whore wife go on and on and on about what sort of loser this normal averge straight hetro guy is...usng really harsh mean nasty vile words.

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Now look at the husband's so called revenge. When the wife's business get taken by the IRS and she goes to jail... the husband never sees it. Neither do we.

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HER words... her actions... he hate... her humilating him went on for YEARS.

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His revenge was shallow meaningless without any passion and cold. Very unsatisfying

he ORS gras her and her $$ we dont here nayting about it.

amd om fact most just become full time celebrity whores unless of course they have an unfortunate accident that winds up leaving the husband all of the net profit.

she had her plans, but he changed them, significantly. the ampunt contempt she showed him? he gave her the illusion of winning and that shattered for her. her confederates were included, extra points for politeness from him while doing this. and a happy ending, as it could be, for him. the resolution for him was good. beauty does not automatically equal bitch, but it did for her. now the bitch will be someones bitch?

Very nice story. Something very refreshing and even funny. If you keep writting stories like this, I will keep reading them with great pleasure. Thanks for sharing it with us!

He still loved her maybe in your dreams you don't know men very well.

Then Kicking Her to the Curb. at Least she got Half of what she wanted. No Jack and all the Sex she can Handle Plus.

Gotta Love a Plan that Comes Together.

must have hurt the writer to add the epilogue.

You write very well.

What a bloody title to claim - glad the posting have stopped.

wheather the previous shit head likes it or not!!

Out of the three stories of yours I've read, Delicate Balance and Youth Trap, I believe this was the tightest story.

I believed all the of the characters.

The one flaw, if you can call it that, is that of her identity. Or maybe not identity. I'm not sure. Did the wife clap on a wig, screw two guys to get Jack offended and then did the same WITH her husband to have 'proof' of adultery? I believe so, but it wasn't as clear as I would like.

If so, I have a hard time believing that a judge or jury would not be able to see, given Jack's testimony, that it WASN'T his wife. A wig wouldn't do it. And if she exposed the disk, he could clearly besmirch her too.

Somehow if the story of entrapment et al made the rounds of her 'society' friends, she'd not be treated particularly well. Other stories used escorts etc to entrap their husbands.

But, if we accepted that premise, then I REALLY liked the ending. The man called his lawyer, signed the paper, was no longer her husband, called the IRS where he was allowed to testify to them. Ha!

She truly managed to get truly and completely screwed over, by her own initative and actions. His chetaing, that was such a big thing for her? And she don't know jack, but she thought she did.

basically I enjoyed it, there fore gave it a five star. This was surprising in my instance because I normally don't care for angiquesophie's stories. R.T.

What looked to be a contemptible story was salvaged at the end. Interesting and well-written, but in the end, the reader is left with just another wimp and his tale of revenge. (And by the way, the IRS doesn't typically work that way, despite how despicable they are in many regards.)

However, the ending was way too extreme and unrealistic. Basically, as written the ending was impossible. With a few minor changes the story would have been plausible. However, since it was to implausible to be possible, I had to rate it 2**.

I can see that a woman might, in many ways, act much as she did, and I can see a man wanting revenge. However, in every state in the union, the assets accumated during the marriage would be split somewhere near 50/50; maybe 60/40 and adultry is not much a factor. It would be nice if it was but that would penalize women. Therefore, it is not permitted. And, for $30 to $50 million, a man is not going to be concerned if people have a few photos.

Your stories seem to start one way then turn mid page into something else...keeps me on the edge of my seat. Your narrative description of persons and sexual acts are unique, imaginative...I simply close my eyes and can see every stroke and touch in my mind..I can even picture a face ad body to each character. Truly a great writer.

on the C.F.O. unless......TK U MLJ LV NV

Another fine story. Thanks.

The thing I have always found lacking in your body of work is a real man and finally you have found your groove. Oh he is average, nothing spectacular but still he manages to rise to the occasion and get the only revenge he can. Perfect. I gave this *****.

Interesting with a subtle but very effective revenge. In the end, beauty may attract but it's what is inside that holds.

Don't fuck with the bean counters. The cheating wife paid in the end.

With all of her money and her freedom.

Fuck her.

HA

in reading this short story.

It's a story easy to follow and appreciate. A brevity of prose yet poignant!

So the reason she married him in the first place is that she saw him as a great 'starter husband' and sponsor who might catch fire with her, but even if he didn't, he would get her started. OK, I can handle that!

Incidentally, as the 'whistle-blower' he is entitled to a percentage of what the IRS recovered in taxes and penalties, plus the business might not sell for prior windfall, but would NOT be valueless. Any of that could taken back to the financial settlement as something like 'hidden assets' and he might get a revised settlement! I also seriously doubt that the IRS would uncover their hand and allow the two officers to take off to Timbuktu!

5*

Uh, yeah. She's been cheating on her taxes for three years, all three of them during their marriage. He knew it and he's not in prison too, despite the fact that his work points directly to him as a culpable party? Divorce or not, makes no sense.

4 stars otherwise.

Smuggling, conspiracies, murders in the dozens, and broken laws (local, state, and federal) out the ying yang..... Just remember how they situated Al Capone into his new digs in Alcatraz! It's ALL in the numbers....and you NEVER screw with he "who" knows where all the financial beans are buried.

with which he saw her and the two gentlemen (we were led to believe) and then later fucked her every which way (ditto) isn't credible. Had you stayed closer to probabilities -- she seems to want to play whore for him as a game, for example, and asks his cooperation -- she could be accomplishing her same purpose and the reader feel less cheated, taken in. Fool your characters, but never your readers by witholding what the characters already know.

Otherwise, delightful. I five-starred it anyhow, a little generously.

Original and enjoyable.

much my ex wife!

Well written. Story line was different and satisfying. She's a bitch. He's an OK guy trying to live a life. Don't mess with an accountant.

Jack, in a fit of rage inspired by her callous humiliation, proceeds to smack the shit eating grin off her face.

So what does she do then ?

If she reports it she will need to reveal her identity.

With her plan revealed to the media as well as her IRS violations, Jack may never be charged as she will not be anything like a sympathetic victim.

Not just financially, but physically. Make sure it happens inside prison.

At what point did he realize the red-head was his wife?

A very good story...no average in it...For me he recognizer her the first night he saw her...

How did the co-conspirators run off with the money when the first thing that would have happened was all the accounts would have been frozen?

Far more likely they would be asked to wait and while they were waiting the cops would be called.

Only big drug dealers keep that kind of money all in cash. (like Breaking Bad style)

The reward for turning in tax cheats to the IRS is a minimum of 15% and up to 30%, but only paid if the total amount involved is over 2 million dollars and the person being turned in has an income over $200,000 per year.

Obviously she qualifies and he could collect.

Well written, and this time the weak little man was also smart. A nice turn of events.

I had thought that perhaps Jack might have been recording Sue's ranting after the out of town escapade. Angiquesophie, you made it even better. Thank you. Good writing and story. Cheers!

I think this could be a spin-off from The Eyes of Laura Mars, TK U MLJ LV NV

Your Dr, Your Lawyer and probably the Indian Chief. TK U MLJ LV NV

I like your writing style. Please keep it up.

I just read this story, and others, I liked the unforeseen ending.

Great reed. v

You do know that, as an IRS informant in a multi-million dollar fraud case, he would be eligible to receive up to fifteen percent (i think it's fifteen; might just be ten) of anything the IRS recovered...

Was Sue's attitude something to do with her inability to bear children? Was her ire towards her husband because he was a reminder of her biological failure to conceive? This is a major issue in a marriage but it was not explored in depth. Besides her feelings about her fertility, there is also the issue of a long term heterosexual relationship that does not involve children and a family. Without the experience of child raising or some other significant shared responsibility between spouses what will keep them from drifting apart? Welding your DNA together with another person in the form of a child is the most basic bond between a man and a woman. Raising that child is the most basic shared experience and can be the most rewarding experience between a man and a woman. Too many of these stories barely mention this when dealing with infertility and the resulting adultery.

Pretty horrific tale well told--not your regular cheating story.

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An interesting point

You do know that, as an IRS informant in a multi-million dollar fraud case, he would be eligible to receive up to fifteen percent (i think it's fifteen; might just be ten) of anything the IRS recovered...

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Fifteen to thirty percent.

It goes up the more direct info the whistleblower provides.

Love the ending. Greed, infidelity, and deception get what they deserved. 8 to 10 in federal prison.

Third story in a row with a psycho wife showing no respect for her husband.

Not my cup of tea sorry.

Good ending, But couldn't he use the DNA plastered all over his body to prove it was his wife ? just sayin, 1/2 of 100 million is quite tempting....???

... from jealous neighbors, divorcing spouses, and pissed off employees, and researching them to see if fraud was true (or a perfectly legitimate CPA accounting trick). Then sic the agents with guns against the baddies. If this was 15 years ago Jack might have contacted my dad!

Like the story, but the slut in the bar was obviously Sue. Though not sure how else you might have staged the revelation. For some reason I can’t quite pit my finger on, this story didn’t pull me on so much. Because of that im giving it 4-stars. Maybe I’ll comeback and read it again, then I might get some insight to why it’s not grabbing me.

So Jack probably got paid pretty well. Since it was a near $100,000,000 company, their net income over three years, pre-tax, had to have been in the tens of millions (otherwise why would another company want to purchase it. They’d want to get thier investment back in, what, 5 years? So really maybe $20m a year?), of which perhaps, after true & legitmate tax shelters, ten or so million was taxable per year. Let’s say this went on for three years, as was mentioned in the story (and I’m going to do some rounding here, and rounding up), so they owe taxes on $30m net. Consider about 35% would be the tax rate, so at the VERY least $10.5 million of taxes should have been paid, over 3 years. Let’s say their tax CPA and/or lawyer were able to show, fraudulently, they were getting half of the profits that they really were. So they defrauded the IRS 1/2 of the, at minimum (and they wouldn’t report zero profits, they needed to make it believable to cursory glance), which is $5.3m they owe the government. Now 15%-30% of that will now go to Jack. So Jack gets, at the minimum $800,000. And I believe that that is tax free. But don’t quote me on the last; couldn’t find that with cursory google search. It’s just something I recall my father saying.

And he got one night of the super hardest nastiest sex with his slut wife!