All Comments on 'F6: Slick's Swamp Shack'

Love how this story plays with the music to turn us on. The homage to slyc is well worked and the four words are seamlessly woven in to the story - fab. My current favourite! :)

The blues playing and history background are so well done. Nicely constructed story, and a sneaky appearance there at the end by Slyc. The words were well woven into the story. Very very few false notes, but "Bimmer" did bother me a bit - or maybe it's where I'm from. A terrific tribute to Slyc.

This story is so rich. The setting is perfect. The characters are fleshed out. I could practically hear the music as I read. I loved the use of the S words as character names. The ending is such a beautiful way to honor Slyc_Willie. I think this one is our winner. Excellent work, FAWCker!

This perfectly fitted the idea of F6. I also thought the use of teh words as names was very clever. I don't really know or understand blues music so i got a bit lost with some of the terminology but other than that great fawcking job. :)

What a great story. Wonderful atmosphere, believable character, the dialogue, the setting were all fantastic. The details and the superb word choices made this one shine. And the tribute to Slyc at the end really brought it home. I could have maybe done with fewer details in the music/guitar playing, it distracted me from the story at times. But in the end it made me want to pick up my own guitar, I haven't played it in ages. Really well done.

I saved this story for last because of the score. I wanted to scope out the others first, see if it deserved its place at the top.

It does.

It's the best story of the challenge by a pretty wide margin. I say that with no slight to the other tales, many of which were very good in their own right and some far more setup to be to my personal liking.

But this one is better almost across the board.

Firstly, the writing moves. Like the lyrics in the story, the sentences just saunter along, one after another, clever and full of worth, but without being bogged down by pretense or writerly intention. The whole thing is very clever, and plotted throughout with little tributes to Slyc and FAWC.

I was sure I'd hate the dialogue by the end, but it didn't. Dialect is a tricky thing, very tricky, and you did it well.

So often, faltering fiction ends up being some approximation of life, almost alive, just askew, like some soulless creature trying to impersonate a human. The movements are technically correct, the words aren't wrong, exactly, but something just isn't there. The gait just isn't natural.

But this one, this one can dance, and sing, and moan the blues. It's got enough complexity to be interesting, and enough simplicity to never be inaccessible.

It's not faultless, and there is some rushing and rewiring in there, I think. But it's clever, funny, memorable, touching, and far and way the winner of this challenge in my opinion.

Not that I put much stock in such things. Neither did Slyc. It was all about taking risks for him, and comraderie, sharing a passion for words and writing.

You clearly did that here. Nice job.

P.S. Lick Swamp Sack had me rolling.

The author who wrote this story is Gorza. Well done! Thanks for FAWCking!

Your story was wonderful on a couple of levels and it was all joined together seamlessly. Like it really happened. The quoting of the song lyrics was a stroke of genius! Well written and thank you.

What a great story, seamless flow, very well told. Thank you.

I lived close to Miss Etta, although by the time I got to know her music she was in her declining years. Could still hit a lick though. Your knowledge of the blues is impressive, driving me to listen to songs I hadn't thought of in years

Oh, and I really liked the story, the interplay between the words, the music, the time and the place setting the perfect scene. Etta would be proud.

Thanks for the read,

QHML1

Any better would too good !