by CatBrown
All through the story I'm thinking how much they seem to need one another only to find out it's a dream. She awakes in the morning to find herself still strapped in the car after her accident. I'm thinking at least she wasn't aware that she was trapped all night. Only to read the last sentence and see the hidden Fairy!
Never has romance ended with such a joyful laugh!
I just loved it........I couldn't help but smile at the ending......I think we all need a little fairy intervention every now and again.
It was the most exciting story i've read ...had me on the edge wanting more. Your description was excellent as i could picture everything. WOW!
Your story has it all: damsel in distress, fairy tale sex, and an unexpected ending. Great story.
It had every element - great story, superb writing, suspense, incredible story telling, elements of fantasy as well as reality, a lovely maiden with relatable issues, a wonderful hero, a beautiful written bedroom scene, a lovely ending with a twist...
As far as the self edit, I thought it was fine... I think I saw one maybe error, nothing glaring, though as a writer, I always can use an editor myself.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
~Airdrie
Hi Cat,
I liked your story very much and will be looking for more. THANKS
Thoroughly enjoyed this story and hope Valentine's day brings our Valerie a new
outlook.
This is a lovely story. I imagine your editor may have left for lack of something to do. I certainly didn't notice anything amiss. I like the contrast of lifestyles and how she found greater fulfillment in the one she found more alien than in the one she thought she preferred. There could be a longer story wandering along that theme, although it doesn't strike me as obviously erotic. I suppose that's where the writing gift comes into play. Good luck.
This was not just a lovely, erotic love story, some serious thought went into this magical tale. One of my favorite parts of the story was when Ian told Val: "Movement is not the same as life...." So true, and something everyone should consider in their lives as well. VERY nice job Cat! This is a winner!
I sent you email... those who say no editing is needed are kind but mistaken. You did a good job editing on your own, but one set of eyes will always miss some stuff. Happy to help out if you'd like.
that was so amazing! would you consider doing a sequel? I would most definitely read it! please do
totally different then i usually read but i love it! and the end was really good! hmm makes me kinda jealous i want a fairy man like that!
Good story with an awful end because the story wasn't complete!! You really should complete it