All Comments on 'Family Day on the Pool Table'

The old guy played with you like you were a little doll. Imagine what he'd do to you if he found out you fucked his wife.

Please stop writing. The world thanks you!

This story would have greatly been enhanced by:

1. A sense of anticipation

2. Dialogue

Practice writing dialogue and you will find that your stories greatly improve.

This prolific writer continues to show that there's more than one way (or even two or three) to craft an excellent story.

Every time I read this story I love it. It rocks, it works, it . . . I just love it. No idea why it isn't HOT.

Could use a tad more detail, but i loved the concept and the hilarious twist at the end. Overall, awesome story. Had me cuming before the dad came in.

need another bath now. since ive just spunked all over my stomach again.?

Three things stand out for me....first, all three brothers take it in turns to ream you out. Second, the eldest upgrades his cock to give you more, even though he has the longest cock. Third, the father waits his turn and really uses you as an object, something to bend and fold and fuck!

Please fix the continuity of the names of the three brothers. Randy goes, then Andy and Frank get their turns, but the names swap around a bit for those paragraphs, making it distractingly difficult to follow.

Take me with you so I can learn to "play pool" too. Would love to take them all on. phtann3@yahoo.com