by wieliczka
apply to this wimp. A 3 years affair still does not stop him from taking back a cheating wife with a bastard.From now on you get a 1 from an unromantic wimp story.
you're a ass hole
oh she changed. Cheaters are cheaters because of personality defects, mental or emotional. Marry a cheater and simply wait around til they cheat again. This woman is more than defective, she is vile. If the child is endangered have the child removed, don't play supercop to protect trash.
You need to get an editor. Biggest of the many errors is that you keep switching the sex of Cathy's child.
Franciszka and little Freddie both names for the child, next Chapter explains. Sorry about not making that clear.
apparently, it's a hermaphrodite:
"Little Freddie has done nothing wrong, and HIS mother, my ex-wife who cheated on me and had this child with another man, has been doing all she can to raise and protect her DAUGHTER."
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA OMFG you wanker, you called it a son and daughter in the same damn paragraph, YOU aren't clear on the sex of the child either. Also POST your shit where it belongs in LW and face the music there you coward. Stop spreading this shit!
Hate your writting. Hey try reading it yourself you woman hating idiot.
Talent without editing is awkward, confusing, and makes for difficult reading. But editing without talent or wit is just well composed properly spelled boredom. You can hire editing, but you can't hire wit or imagination. The writing needs editing, but the story shows good wit and imagination. I hope you continue. And yes, Loving Wives is where this should be. Damn the torpedoes! Words will never hurt you, a lot.
You write a very interesting story which suggests that you come from a different world than most of the commentator... Keep it up, I enjoy ideas and dialogue.
Family is blood. Were your family actually worth one shit and raised you properly, you would understand that. Sad that mongrels like you think that this kind of thing is acceptable nowadays.
And of course, because I was not a plot puppet character in a shitty writer's story, I dropped the material off at the police, and understood that there will always be plenty of people in need of help in this world, and of course no actual person, and no fictional character that has been crafted half-way competently, would actually spend their time and money helping their enemies, while ignoring actually innocent people's needs, just because of the world's most magical vagina.
Serves him right.If he hadn't doctored the condom he wouldn't have had the problem.
Stories are about taking the reader to somewhere else. It is about getting into the character's life, they way that the characters see the world. You don't have to agree with the characters (many times I don't). These characters were inspired by actual people that lived over the past 80 years as they thought and felt and acted. If all you want to see is what you know, look in a mirror. Get out of your self once in a while. If I write about real shit people, are you also going to say that that is not real? Wieliczka
This chapter was an interesting twist in the story. It shows how family can overcome a lot, but at what cost.
What in the world is "Romantic" about this? Both the slut and her cum guzzling mother cheated through out their marriage. Niether had a plan to stop. Cathy has been cheating for 3yrs without a single thought about her husband. Why is her little problem his problem? They're divorced, it's not his job to help her. Fuck that slut and her bastard baby. Is the romance section like the cuck RAAC section? I dont see any man giving a shit about his ex slut wife problems.
3stars. Yeuch! I gave pt1 5. I knew this would go downhill. The inbred child isn't his. Why support it? That is mommyslut and grannyslut's problem. Daddyuncle never stepped up? Not his problem. She forfieted any protection from her exhusband by her own actions. Not necessarily a cuck story; just contrived and stupid.
I reread this and can't believe I never commented and gave you 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS as a score. Thanks! On to part 3.