All Comments on 'Fate Ch. 02'

Things are happening pretty quickly, without much background, and you really need an editor. The grammar errors are getting to be a bit much to go through.

wonderful

not having an intense background keeps you wondering, guessing

because you pull me into the story so well, my mind skips the grammar mistakes even though i know they are there

keep going! cant wait for the next

long time since last chap I truely hope you plan on continuing.