All Comments on 'Feeding on Christopher Ch. 01'

Cryptic and a good lead in but a little heavy on a teaser story. The next part should be at least 1-3 pages to delve into the story. That is of course if the author wants to give it that kind of depth.

kinda would be kool if this is a love story

Now where is the rest of it, dammit? :-D

Nice start.

Not many have these kinds of experiences... Please tell more. There are more things under heaven, Horatio...

First, this was a really enjoyable to read, regardless of length. It's certainly a hell of a lot better than my first one. The way you write gives the story a sort of feeling like you're looking into smoke and shadows and seeing little glimpses of things. I thought it was very well done. It flows well and the details aren't overbearing at all. Rated 5.

Also, "and when she next speaks, her words seem to pass right through him, unheard." That is a beautiful line. If it's yours, you're a poet. If it's not, then you're a thief with excellent taste and I applaud you.

Anyway, continue writing. You're good at it.