by RetMarut
I read it, but it took every ounce of concentration I had... Read like a technical textbook. I don't mind higher level reading, just makes it VERY hard to get into!
Perhaps a tad over-written in places, but a delightful change from some of the illiterate dross on this site. Thank you.
When he said he liked inflicting cruelty on those who deserve it, which made him out to be a cruel person himself. Well-written in a technical way but I had no sympathy for either character, so that shot any eroticism (if that's what you were aiming for).
You are obviously obsessed with or trying to impress someone with your shameful over use of adjectives and adverbs. Who are you trying to impress?