All Comments on 'First Night at Monica's'

hips cocked at an angle, like a loaded Magnum revolver

sheesh

I like gun metaphors :(

Thanks for the feedback, though.

but bring your rod. Good hot sex. Just the ticket, mate.

Make. More.

I'd love to see more from you if the quality is at this level. For a first story here, this is damn good.

I'm not much for romance, but I enjoyed this just fine. However, a little small talk never hurt anybody, and cutting up those walls of text would improve the flow a little.

But, past my shoddy evaluation attempts, I'd like to see a Second Night at Monica's. As much as I love to hear cougars purr, and as good as you are, Monica needs another night with this guy.

Oh, and just one tiny thing. "Making love" is usually reserved for later chapters. Not too many people make love on the first date. But it's your story, your style, your words. I'm just a reader here.

5 stars, keep it up for posterity.

- Galloglaich -

I jacked out to this story and I shot my cum higher than usuall

outstanding for a first! the suspense is excruciating ... and euphoric