by mick52
I reread this 3 times to be sure I had the name changes correct, sorry I didn't catch all of them.
Loved it. This has potential to extend to more chapters. The girls' thighs between the thighs was nice but could we have the full vtv (vulva to vulva) next time?
Our stories we write, its cool to get feedback but if you want vulva to vulva action go find your own girl on girl gig and watch. What an idiot!
Need to spell out all the names -
It is easier to read when the names are spelled out.
Also, it is confusing - 1st para. It is Chris and Mark. Then it changes to Cathy and Mark.
Some of the quotes need introductions.