by StaffWriter
Really wish you would continue this story. Very well written and leaves me wanting more.
Plenty of detail. I could see how one review thought "overwritten" – and maybe it could've used a smidgeon of editing – but I thought it was a great story.
Well worth the time.
Showing GREAT promise. Well written, realistic, sexy. Do continue!
Started out Ok, but it was overwritten and goes nowhere. If the guy's point is that he wants to see his gf give head, then why cut the story off? Maybe he should take some stills of her felating him, post them on the internet, maybe more fun and a lot less risky.