All Comments on 'Friendly Janitor'

This is a very well written, very HOT story! It is believable both in the emotional as well as physical aspects. This is a must read!!

Your story has some extremely bad sections that could stand a mojor rewrite.

Example this secquence:

squirt, suck, squirt, suck, squeeze, suck.

"Julie, oh, Julie, ohhh... Julie, Julie, Julie..."

The constnt repeating yourself especially with the exact same phase in is bad form and grammer. It becomes worse if there like the second sentence it's stuck between paragraphs without any valid reason other than to fill up space.